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Thu Jun 25, 2015 5:15 am
hermione315 says...



Hello witches, wizards, muggles, and squibs! This is Hermione and I suppose it's round time I made one of these pages. If you're needing reviews, my reviews are honest and kind at the same time. I will point out things that I like and dislike, and I'll also mention what I think you could do to make your pieces better. Here is what I will accept:
-poetry
-novel chapters (early chapters, preferably)
-short stories
-articles
-lyrics

Here are things I won't accept:
-fanfiction (that isn't Harry Potter or Percy Jackson)
-anything rated 18+

I'll do my best to make my reviews as detailed as possible. I'm skilled at grammar and punctuation and capable of tearing pieces apart for mistakes in those areas, but I won't if you specify you'd rather me focus on content.

I will review your pieces as quickly as possible. Hopefully I can review each of them within the week they are requested. I'm not asking for anything in return for my reviews; a simple thank you will suffice. Let me know if you have any questions. Thanks! :D
Last edited by hermione315 on Tue Dec 22, 2015 10:48 pm, edited 5 times in total.
  





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Sun Jun 28, 2015 10:07 pm
bluewaterlily says...



Hi, Hermione. :) I was wondering if you could review a short story for me. Here it is:

Dangerous Creatures

Thanks :) If you need anything reviewed, please let me know.
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Mon Jun 29, 2015 4:50 am
hermione315 says...



@bluewaterlily I'm all done! Anyone else?
  





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Sun Jul 05, 2015 4:20 pm
yizhongt says...



Hey there could you please review

The Chalice of Life: Chapter 1

P/s it is somewhat like Harry Potter, I drew a lot of inspiration from there, a lot. Would like to see what you think. Thank you
  





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Mon Jul 06, 2015 1:32 am
hermione315 says...



@yizhongt I'm all done! Phew! That was a long review. Anyone else?
  





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Tue Jul 07, 2015 3:41 pm
SilverRose says...



hey could you check out my poem

perfection
You see there's no real ending
It's only the beginning - Shinedown Her Name Is Alice

the winner writes history but the other side will waiting to be heard. - me
  





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Wed Jul 08, 2015 4:27 am
hermione315 says...



I'm all done @SilverRose. Keep the pieces coming people! :)
  





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Thu Jul 09, 2015 5:49 am
roeckercody says...



I would love if you could review my chapters from The Tree People (some may still be in the green room) and also Curses (Prologue)

The more harsh you are the better. (Do note I am working on showing and not telling) I really really want to improve.

I appreciate it immensely! Thank you!
  





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Thu Jul 09, 2015 10:06 am
yizhongt says...



Hey hermione315, could you please review

Chalice of Life: Chapter 2

I would really like your feedback. Thank you very much. Cheers !!
  





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Thu Jul 09, 2015 7:49 pm
hermione315 says...



I'm all done @yizhongt.

@roeckercody, please give me a bit of time to look over your pieces, and I'll get back to you. It might take a while because I'm going to be really busy the next few days. Next time you request could you please send me links to the pieces you want me to review? That would be extremely helpful. Thank you!
  





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Fri Jul 17, 2015 8:18 am
yizhongt says...



Hey Hermione, would you be so kind to give some feedback for

Chalice of Life: Chapter 3

And perhaps chapter 4 if time permits.

Please and thank you !!
  





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Sat Aug 15, 2015 1:15 pm
hermione315 says...



I'm sorry for the tremendous delay, @yizhongt, but I'm finally finished with your review of chapter three!

Anyone else?
  





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Sun Aug 16, 2015 3:26 am
yizhongt says...



Hey @hermione315, no problem at all. If you could review the other chapters it would be great. Thanks in advance !
  





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Sun Aug 16, 2015 5:38 am
Lightsong says...



Please review this sub-chapter! :) When Dream and Reality Collide [Chapter 1.0]
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  





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Sun Aug 16, 2015 5:45 am
Lorelie says...



Hi!

I've looked up one of your previous reviews and I'd really like a review from you. My work's still in the Green Review, if you hurry up xD It's a first chapter.

So, I'd like you to make a detailed grammar review (one quote for each type of mistake is enough) and an overall one on the characters (but if you do guess something about the plot, do elaborate). Apart from the grammar, I'd like you to tell me what do you think will happen next.

I've also posted in the Review Trading Center
Anyway, my work is titled 1 Too early might as well be worse than too late
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