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Tue Jun 09, 2015 2:58 pm
Lael says...



Hi guys! I would like some works to review. So if you have any, you've probably come to the right place. :wink:

Things I will not review:
1. Submissions with cussing (a.k.a. Language)
2. Works with explicit, intimate scenes (nothing more than kissing)
3. If I think that the work goes against my beliefs, I will not review it. (But don't worry, most works won't.)

I will review any type of submission (poems, shorts, novels, lyrics, etc.) for grammar, spelling, plots, and some other stuff. If you are a sensitive person, you MIGHT think that my reviews are harsh.

I will do my best to give you helpful advice on what to fix in your writings! So go ahead and post below! :)
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Wed Jun 10, 2015 5:26 pm
faunafaun says...



Hey, so I'm interested. Will you review my works under the Portfolio 'White Heron?'
My poetry goes against #2. So please just read and review 'White Heron.'
Thanks a bunch, EmmaKi <3
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Wed Jun 10, 2015 10:25 pm
Lael says...



Hey faunafaun, I would love to do so, but I cannot see any of your works under your portfolio. Just to make sure, are you sure that your submission is published? It might just be me, so I'll keep checking for a day or two. If it so happens that I can't review your work, I'm sorry. :(
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Sat Jun 13, 2015 4:56 pm
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@faunafuan, for some reason, I cannot view your work anywhere. I am really sorry about that. :(
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Sun Jun 14, 2015 8:35 pm
BlueSunset says...



Could you review one of my works, @EmmaKi? I want some feedback on Imaginary Friend
It is a recent work that I have published, so I hope you like it! Thanks! :D
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Sun Jun 14, 2015 11:13 pm
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@Sunset101, I have reviewed your work.

@faunafaun, if you still need a review, try posting the link on this thread, because I could not view your work anywhere.
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Thu Jun 18, 2015 5:17 pm
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@faunafaun, I have reviewed all of your White Heron submissions.
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Fri Jun 19, 2015 11:21 am
Unashamed116 says...



Hey! I'm very interested in a review. I only have 10 chapters so far, but would you be willing to review what I DO have?
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Fri Jun 19, 2015 5:05 pm
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@Unashamed116, just post a link to your first chapter, and I will see what I can do.
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Fri Jun 19, 2015 5:37 pm
Unashamed116 says...



EmmaKi wrote:@Unashamed116, just post a link to your first chapter, and I will see what I can do.

@EmmKi, Awaited One: Chapter 1
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Fri Jun 19, 2015 7:03 pm
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@Unashamed116, for some reason, I can't view your work. When I click the link you posted, it says that the work does not exist. I'm sorry. I will try to see if I can view it in the next few days.
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Fri Jun 19, 2015 10:20 pm
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EmmaKi wrote:@Unashamed116, for some reason, I can't view your work. When I click the link you posted, it says that the work does not exist. I'm sorry. I will try to see if I can view it in the next few days.


@EmmaKi, They removed it because I posted in a forum. :/ But, it also won't let me publish a single chapter...

Try this instead:
Awaited One: Chapters 1-3 :D
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Sat Jun 20, 2015 12:08 am
Lael says...



@Unashamed116, that one doesn't work either...
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Mon Jun 22, 2015 7:10 am
DrFeelGood says...



I would like a review on this work. (I'm not sure if it fulfills your third criteria. Hope it does :)

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Mon Jun 22, 2015 5:05 pm
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First of all, @DivineFool, what is it about, exactly? I don't really understand what you're trying to say in the poem. From what it seems to me, it seems like a violation of #3...
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