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Thu Jun 09, 2016 8:56 pm
Costa says...



Sure thing but in the eventuality that you spot something glaringly wrong in the prior chapters, could you still hit me with a quick PM?

Beyond that, I'll gladly take whatever feedback you're willing to give.

And, yes, I remember you posting in one of them... don't know which, though! :p
  





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Mon Oct 17, 2016 2:09 am
Kaylaa says...



Since you opened this back up, reviewing this would be great:

Absence makes the heart grow fonder

Thank you!

Will Review For Food - Always taking review requests!

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Formerly Nikayla
  





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Fri Nov 11, 2016 9:51 pm
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Dracula says...



Could you please give me a long, critical review on one of my NaNo stories? profile/Dracula/portfolio/470967

I don't mean to be ungrateful, but most of the reviews I'm currently getting are short and very kind.... so not very helpful.
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. I got depressed because I thought Damn, I am less nurturing than a desert.
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Wed Nov 16, 2016 3:36 pm
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ceb21 says...



Would love some feedback on the first chapter of my story, In Real Life. It's under books. Thank you, thank you, thank you to all who respond!!
  





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Fri Nov 18, 2016 1:03 pm
Mea says...



Done Dracula's and ceb21's. Request away!
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
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Tue Nov 22, 2016 10:04 pm
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Lumi says...



Pleeeeease <3 hummingbird
I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.
-Shinji Moon


I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.
  





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Tue Dec 13, 2016 3:05 pm
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Charm says...



I'd love it if you could review my novel Atana. It's a science fiction and I'm in love with it. I want someone to follow it and give helpful reviews without depressing me xD (still i want honesty but please don't tear my pride in the process of tearing apart my novel). Here's the link to the first chapter, though there are eight chapters on YWS.

marmalade

//edit
I removed the link because I decided to republish Atana. I edited it so deeply that's it's practically new (I think). The plot's the same just a lot of the world is different. I'll edit this again and put the link here when I gather enough points to publish the first chapter. Please feel free to tear it to bits <3

//edit again
Atana: Chapter 1
Last edited by Charm on Wed Dec 14, 2016 3:58 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Tue Dec 13, 2016 8:04 pm
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shima says...



Would like for you to review my, ahem, "description (I guess)" of a character. Would like advise on language, how to write him better...etc
  





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Thu Dec 15, 2016 5:59 pm
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felidae says...



Hey, mea. It'd be really good if you could review my short story if you have time. It's not very good, but I'd love to improve it with your help.
Thanks <3
Tiger, tiger, burning bright
In the forests of the night,
What immortal hand or eye
Dare frame thy fearful symmetry?
  





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Thu Dec 15, 2016 7:58 pm
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Mea says...



@marmalade @shima @felidae - Thanks for requesting, guys! I'm definitely not ignoring these, it's just been an extremely busy week. I'll get to them all tomorrow when I'm finally off of school.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  





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Tue Dec 20, 2016 5:14 pm
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ElvenJedi says...



Heylo, you got time to review my first chapter? Here it is: Chapter 1

The story is based off a video game called ARK, basically a giant prehistoric island with tribes on it and dinosaurs that you tame, etc. When you read it (if you have time) please don't pay attention to the fact that it's off of a video game--it will just be a normal fiction adventure book if I finish it.

When(or if) you decide to review it I really want to know what emotions the reader feels coming off the words, if any. Also I'm worried that it might be too unclear, as I'm writing it first person and that always gets kinda tangled.

Anyway, please review this chapter and it agrees to all your conditions-- no mature content or any of that garbage, and it has some violence but it's only between her and an animal. If you decide to review this, thank you very much! If not, then I completely understand.
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Tue Dec 27, 2016 11:58 pm
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CarryOnMrCaulfield says...



This is the Exordium to a low fantasy epic I am currently writing. I was wondering if you could take a look. The first three chapters, which occur ten years following the Exordium, are also posted, if you would also be interested in taking a look.

The Carpenter - Exordium of Shattered Crowns

- Holden
  





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Fri Jan 20, 2017 4:25 am
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inktopus says...



Hi, I'm entering this short story in a contest so I need all the help I can get. Here's the link if you want to review it: Her Sun
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Thu Apr 06, 2017 7:26 pm
shima says...



Would like for you to review my "story"/letter - Letter to a dead girl.
  





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Sun Aug 20, 2017 11:51 am
Mea says...



BUMP because I apparently forgot to do this when I came back to YWS like 2 months ago.

I'm taking requests again! Since RevMo's starting soon, bring them on! :D
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  








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