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Tue Sep 08, 2015 11:53 pm
ChocolateCello says...



Disputatores- Chapter 1

Dying for some feedback on this one ^
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Thu Sep 10, 2015 9:24 pm
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Mea says...



Done with @artybirdy's and @ChocolateCello's!

I'm open again.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
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Fri Sep 11, 2015 12:08 am
Lightsong says...



Please get this piece out of the Green Room! :D Colourful War
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The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

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Wed Sep 16, 2015 8:10 pm
paula08 says...



Hi, can you review this short poem for me please?

Endangered

Thanks in advance - P
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Fri Oct 30, 2015 2:33 am
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DiskElemental says...



Hey,

Looking to get a bit of feedback on the first part of the first chapter of my NaNo novel. I'm largely interested in making sure it "works" as a hook, and doesn't overwhelm the reader with information.

Thanks,
Disk
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Sun Nov 01, 2015 9:57 am
lawrence says...



i really need your opinion on this one
Dececption - Chapter One - Words Betray
  





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Mon Nov 02, 2015 4:27 am
Mea says...



@DiskElemental - done!

@lawrence - Unfortunately, you have your chapter saved as a draft, so I can't see it. Please publish it so I can review it!
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  





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Mon Nov 02, 2015 8:06 am
lawrence says...



Deception - Chapter One - Words Betray

i sure hope this is it. thanks
  





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Thu Jun 02, 2016 10:47 pm
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LordWolf says...



I realize that my work is a bit different, emotional and personal. This should serve as a lesson to me not to write stuff when stuff is bad. Anyways I still would like a review for it. There is a touch of cursing but it's not too bad.
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Fri Jun 03, 2016 1:50 am
Mea says...



@ElizabethLovelace - I'll get to that this weekend, probably! Can you tell me what your purpose for writing the piece was? I think it'll help me review it more throughly.
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  





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Fri Jun 03, 2016 2:04 am
LordWolf says...



This won't make much sense but...
-Basically I was trying to write about my life but not in the detached way I normally do. Usually I take a bunch of stuff from my life good and bad, and then create a character from it. I just wanted to write something from my own way for once.
-Also I'm bad when it comes to talking to people so this was an easy way to avoid having to talk to someone about my emotions.

-To sum all that nonsense up, my life has been bad lately and I wanted it to influence something besides depressing and traumatic novel characters.
  





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Wed Jun 08, 2016 1:21 am
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Calliope3 says...



Hello! I have read a couple of your reviews and I like how thorough they are. Can you please review my poem?

Things Which Are Seen

Thanks for your time :)
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2016 11:36 am
Mea says...



@Calliope3 - Done!

(Noting for myself - Elizabeth's is also done.)

Also, the front page has been updated. Please read before requesting!
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2016 3:49 pm
Costa says...



Is there a limit to how many chapters can be requested? Because I've an ongoing story 16 chapters in and I'd appreciate insight on pretty much as many as you're willing to do! :)

If you're interested, here's the link to the start.

One thing to note is that Chapter 2 has reviews over your specified maximum but most of those were for an earlier, much shorter draft. Only the two more recent ones were for the updated version.

Thanks for your time.
  





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Thu Jun 09, 2016 8:39 pm
Mea says...



@Costa - I'm iffy about accepting large numbers of novel chapters to review, just because it takes so much time. (Probably should have specified that in my first post).

But since it's summer for me now and I have time, how about I read your novel from the beginning, and begin giving you feedback at Chapter 9, the point where they're still in the Green Room? It'll probably take me a day to catch up, then I'll do 1-2 reviews a day.

(Also, I believe I actually have reviewed one of your chapters. I think it was during Review Day. :P)
We're all stories in the end.

I think of you as a fairy with a green dress and a flower crown and stuff.
-EternalRain

I think you, @Deanie and I are like the Three Book Nerd Musketeers of YWS.
-bluewaterlily
  








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