Young Writers Society

Hey! Welcome! Have a seat, and a tub of ice cream! You may be wondering, what do I review? Does "anything & everything" answer that?
So, my costs are:
100 Points
A post on my wall

If this sounds like a good deal to you, then leave a reply to this topic with your link.

My Bestest Friend (Translation from the German.) Deal (assuming your still open) 'cause no-one will touch this with a barge pole...
Basically I'm looking for things where I might have used a poor word choice, or my word choice could be improved, or my rhymes, or anything like that, as it is quite deviated from the original. But a different rhyme scheme or subject would be out of the question. If you looked at the original lyrics (link in work) before reviewing that would be appreciated. Tell me if there's anything I could rhyme and have a closer meaning.

Alright, I will get to that right away.