Hey there peeps. I have a first chapter of my story, called The Siege, labeled by the fantasy and mystery/suspense. I'm here becouse i need a rewiev on a specific thing.
I need opinions on character developement in this particular chapter Chapter one:No chance to succeed. Also opinions about the storyline would be appreciated. There is also a prologue you can but dont have to read to be able to review the first chapter.
This is a make or break chapter here, so whatever i do here i will have to go on with it for the rest of the story, and thats why i need help.
Have a nice day,
-Alchemist
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