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Mon Apr 14, 2014 2:34 pm
DrFeelGood says...



Thanks for your amazing review. I have posted new story [First attempt at novel] Please tell me whether it is engaging and I need your help in pacing of the story. Thanks! The Perfect Thief (Revised) Prologue
  





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Mon Apr 14, 2014 11:13 pm
Snowery says...



I'll be on it as soon as I can :)
The World Is Mine.
  





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Sat Apr 19, 2014 9:59 am
DrFeelGood says...



Hi Silver! I have posted the first chapter The Perfect Thief (Revised) Chapter 1 :D Thanks!
  





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Sat Apr 19, 2014 10:03 am
Snowery says...



I'll get on to both of those as soon as I can!
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Tue Apr 29, 2014 5:41 am
Snowery says...



Done. Come on people!! This circus needs an audience!! :D
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Fri May 16, 2014 12:51 pm
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[center]Previously known as ArtStyx[/center]
  





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Fri May 16, 2014 12:54 pm
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@ArtStyx I'll be on it as soon as I can! :)
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Sat May 17, 2014 4:16 am
DrFeelGood says...



Hi Silver! I have updated the story:
The Perfect Thief Chapter 3 Part 1

I'm quite confused with it at the moment, whether to continue the story or rewrite it again, completely. Waiting for your suggestions! Thanks!
  





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Sat May 17, 2014 3:39 pm
GoldFlame says...



Why isn't this place ninety-nine pages? :D
β€œHe leant tensely against the wall and frowned like a man trying to unbend a corkscrew by telekinesis.” – Douglas Adams
  





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Sun May 18, 2014 4:51 am
Snowery says...



@GoldFlame Haha! Clearly because no-one wants one of Silverlock's reviews :P There must be something wrong with them. :/
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Sun May 18, 2014 4:52 am
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@ArtStyx can't seem to find your chapter, can you link it to me?
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Sun May 18, 2014 5:04 am
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Silverlock wrote:@GoldFlame Haha! Clearly because no-one wants one of Silverlock's reviews :P There must be something wrong with them. :/


No way! I'm desperately waiting for your review :P
  





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Sun May 18, 2014 5:15 am
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Haha! :) I'll get to it as soon as I finish my other reviewing commitments :)
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Sun Jun 15, 2014 8:46 pm
ire123 says...



Can you review the first chapter of my story Unexpected happening?
  





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Wed Jun 18, 2014 12:50 pm
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Hey @ire123 I can't seem to find your story :/ Could you post me a link?
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