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Mon Feb 24, 2014 2:06 am
Evander says...



I am no longer taking requests.
Last edited by Evander on Wed Aug 13, 2014 7:39 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 1:01 am
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speakerskat says...



memberlist.php?first_char=s&start=1850

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Wooden Spears
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 1:06 am
Evander says...



You want me to review the member list???
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 1:06 am
Evander says...



And I will get to that tomorrow!
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 3:40 am
BluesClues says...



How about a novel that's done, but I could just link you to the first chapter? No pressure to read further if it's not your cup of tea. But I just rewrote the opening, so more commentary on that would be appreciated.

Just in case: The Book Man, Chapters 1-2 (Revised)

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Wed Apr 30, 2014 3:43 am
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@BlueAfrica I will try and review that tomorrow after I finish writing my chapter!
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 3:45 am
BluesClues says...



Muchos gracias!
  





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Wed Apr 30, 2014 6:00 pm
Evander says...



@speakerskat You linked the memberlist to me. What did you actually want reviewed?
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 9:16 pm
speakerskat says...



oh that one and my short I sent you
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Wed Apr 30, 2014 9:30 pm
Evander says...



Okay,
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 12:41 am
DeltaEcho says...



Link: http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/work.php?id=113692
Genre: Action/Adventure
Summery: She sat, watching in horror, as armed men, dressed all in black, came storming into her school.
Can the review please focus on my characters?
Thanks!
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Sat Jul 19, 2014 11:21 am
windrattlestheblinds says...



Monachopsis
The genre is fantasy. It's also a fanfiction; if you're not into that, that's fine, just let me know, but I would prefer to have it reviewed as an independent piece (it's only tangentially related to the source material).
Summary for this bit: "A mother brings her young son to meet the all-powerful force that holds Wonderland together. It doesn't go well."
I'd love to see it picked over with a fine comb. Otherwise, a focus on character and anything confusing would be much appreciated.
  








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