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Wed Feb 07, 2018 1:59 am
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ShadowVyper says...



Welcome to the Vyper's Den!

Come on in, make yourself comfortable. I'm glad you're here!

Clearly, since you're reading this, you've written something that you'd like feedback on. So I'll give you some general expectations for what you'll be getting if you request one from me!

My Style


My style tends to be making comments about anything that stands out to me as I'm reading. That means I'll point out specific phrases/bits of dialogue/descriptions that I really liked and thought you did a great job with -- as well as awkward bits that you can improve upon. I try to give specific, concrete examples of what I'm talking about, taken directly from your own work.

I will then give you a general overview of my thoughts about your piece as a whole. This is generally where you'll get critiques on pacing, flow, characters, plot, etc. The stuff that relates to your story as a whole.

I'm not great at self-promotion, but I generally look at reviewers' past work before I request a review from them, so feel free to do the same and check out my past reviews if you want to see the sort of review you'll be getting.


My Preferences


I write action/adventure and fantasy and I read sci-fi so those are what I'm most comfortable with and are what I will probably be able to give you the best feedback on. However, I'm open to other genres as well. It's just possible that I won't be able to provide quite as thorough as feedback on them.


What I Won't Review


I retain the right to refuse any review for any reason -- but in general there's not much that I'm not willing to review. I'm a bit squeamish so overly graphic horror (especially supernatural!) I will likely not be able to get through, but feel free to request it, and I'll see if it's too grisly for me to stomach.

I won't review actively anti-religious pieces either, but with a caveat. I am a Christian and I don't enjoy reading pieces that are just talking about how stupid/wrong/etc. Christians are for their beliefs. However, if you take the time to write a thoughtful essay on the matter and you're looking for feedback on how a Christian would answer your arguments, I'm totally down for that. Here is an example of when I did just that.


Q&A

Spoiler! :
Q: Will You Review Poetry?

A:
Sure, but I'm really not good at it. With how many talented poetry reviewers are on this site I'd recommend you ask one of them instead -- but if you ask me for one, I'll give it my best shot!

Q: Will You Review Novel Chapters?

A:
Absolutely! I love novels, and all the chapters that come with them! That being said, I am a student, and that leads to me not having a ton of free time to spend on reviewing entire novels -- so I will probably only review the chapter that you link to me here. Feel free to ask me to review subsequent chapters that have already been posted, but know that I might not be able to get to those.

Q: Can I Ask For A Specific Type Of Critique?

A:
Sure thing! I try to give a pretty comprehensive review in general, but if there's a specific aspect of your piece that you want me to focus on then feel free to let me know and I will do my best to really zero in on that.

Bring on the requests!
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Thu Jan 03, 2019 7:17 am
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ShadowVyper says...



Does anyone want to feed my Rampage? :D
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AlyTheBookworm says...



Hi Shadow!

Could you review Luminous: Cicadas (Prologue) ?

It's a 2,500 word prologue for a fantasy novel I'm writing. I'm mostly looking for feedback on story, characters, and pacing, but any suggestions or constructive criticism would be appreciated if you'd like to check it out. :)
  





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Tue Jan 15, 2019 4:38 am
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ShadowVyper says...



Will do! I’m traveling now but I’ll try to get it done on Thursday! :) @AlyTheBookworm
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Fri Jan 18, 2019 5:29 am
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ShadowVyper says...



Done!
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manilla says...



Heya! Would you mind reading this? You don't need any knowledge of the fandom to understand what's going on.

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Sat Feb 16, 2019 5:12 am
ShadowVyper says...



Done! Anyone else? :D
Shady, Lord of the Shadows

Knight Vyper, Warrior of the Green Room

"YWS' Supreme Nazi of Grammar"~ As dubbed by Holofernes

Victor of the first ever YWS Hunger Games Event
  








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