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McDaydreamer wrote:"Now to finish this..." Munletta mumbled under her breath. (period. The 'boom' isn't part of the sentence. BOOM! A flash of smoke abruptly appeared in the narrow cave the siybl called "home". (Period again. They have this tendency of showing up at the end of sentences... But I love the description!) after the smoke cleared a dragon no bigger than a grown mans' (that should be "man's") palm appeared in the sibyls' (and that's "sibyl's" black bulky cauldren. (Period. Also, that's spelled "cauldron") "Now... For part two of my plan...... Use the same number of periods for elipses when you're writing formally like this - it's just more professional-looking. The number most people use is three, FYI."
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