This novel is in construction, and I've posted a few chapters on here but not only are these edited but it also goes up to five rather than just two, and I think I'll get better feedback with posting the entire novel. It's only a little over 50 pages right now, so it's not long at all (at least for a novel).
I'm looking for suggestions on how to make it better, problems you may see with something relating to the plot (I catch them all the time in my other novels), etc. Nothing specific really.
Plot:
One night, in the home of a very wealthy business man, a young child was stolen. The child was pronounced dead, disappeared without a trace. His parents were never the same.
Years later he sits at a camp. A very cruel camp that not only abuses him physically but also emotionally. Many boys were at this camp. One night this child, by the name of Marcus, decided he was sick of all this and aids the help of a boy who claims to have been outside of the camp to escape. They succeed, but at a very high cost.
They find themselves at the home of a kind lady by the name of Jolene that promises to help them for a couple weeks until their parents are found. No one believes their story of the camp, but secrets are about to come out. Secrets that no one, not even Marcus, could have imagined. Now that he has the life he always wanted he wants nothing more than to help the other boys at the camp get that same life. But it won’t be easy.
PS- If anyone has a reality fiction novel without romance being the entire plot let me know and I can totally give you feedback on it. I can never find any realistic fiction novels without romance on here, so I would be very happy if you would point me in the right direction.
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