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Children of Dread - Blood Oath



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Tue Jan 26, 2016 3:11 am
EmmVeePi says...



Book one of my fantasy/mythological epic. I am still open to possibly making it part one of a single book but for the time being it is a stand alone book. It stands at 40,500 words right now. I will go ahead and rate this 16+ for some violence and suggestion of sexuality(nothing explicit).

The story starts out following two princes who get swept out to sea during a storm and meet two strangers on an island. Later they return to their kingdom and one is made king. After that a mysterious wander arrives and things will never be the same in the kingdom.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e-fYfBSHP_YbgAoUvjcdEQ7XThLIAfVXDEb9Ll4wM9E/edit?usp=sharing

Looking for "big picture" editing. I am not that concerned with specific grammar and punctuation right now(however if there is a rule I am repeatedly breaking or a major weakness on the technical side feel free to inform me). Story arc, character development, pacing, concept, these are the things I am interested in getting feedback on.
  








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