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Sun Sep 02, 2007 4:51 am
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Snoink says...



Sometimes, in the heat of the moment, you can write these horribly awful soppy scenes. Now, if you're lucky, then it's just narrative and you can cut it out and throw it in the trash can. Narrative, though important, isn't that important.

But sometimes that's impossible. Why? Because you might write it as dialogue. And dialogue, especially if written at the heat of the moment, should not be thrown away lightly.

So, if it's soppy yet has some potential, then try injecting some sarcasm in it. Not brutal sarcasm, but light sarcasm that is almost like a gentle nudge. This can be very helpful for making the scene less corny, yet still endearing.
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Sun Sep 30, 2007 12:01 pm
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Jasmine Hart says...



Thanks Snoink. That's really good advice.
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Tue Dec 08, 2009 11:05 pm
Critiq says...



Something about this just irks me. If you don't take your work seriously, who will, especially in an emotional moment such as this? It works for lighter encounters, of course. But not for the stuff with weight. But I trust your experience. Just, I suppose, use with caution.
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