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Rila: God's Assasin [Second Draft]



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Fri Aug 20, 2021 4:48 am
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Lightsong says...



For those who've reviewed/read it, you'd know what is it about. If you don't, check out my portfolio! :D

But basically, it was about Rila carrying out this assassination mission. I'm going to make a second draft for this. I've rewritten the flashback which would serve as the starting point of the story, before we go to the present. Can't wait to write present-time part.

Stay tuned! :D
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Mon Aug 23, 2021 3:45 am
Lightsong says...



There's actually a lot going on here. ._.

But the gist should be:

- flashback, then present time (checked)
- Rila tried to kill Gael, but failed
- tried a second time by teleporting them to another place and kill him there
- Ilami was included as well, which makes the assassination more difficult
- she had to separate them
"Writing, though, belongs first to the writer, and then to the reader, to the world.

The subject is a catalyst, a character, but our responsibility is, has to be, to the work."

- David L. Ulin
  








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