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Sun Aug 06, 2017 12:37 am
ChieTheWriter says...



So. I guess I'll just start and list characters, basic storyline, and the setting. The rest is a working progress.

-Title-


First issue, if anyone is reading this I would love to hear input on a title name. I'll mix them up but titles are the thing I'm sort of bad at coming up with. That and character/place names. So read the basic storyline and post a suggestion?

-Characters-


My favorite part. Here I'll list the major characters in the story. Briefly. When I have more time I'll come back and write a huge description of them.

Drew Chandler: A sixteen year old boy who's had a rough life and is moving to his new home with the sheriff in Ruby Springs, Nevada.

Zeke Jarrett: The main antagonist of the story who is out to end the son of an old enemy.

Jake McCoy: The kindhearted but no-nonsense sheriff of Ruby Springs, the one who takes Drew in.

Bill McCoy: Jake's rowdy son.

Sally McCoy: Jake's sensible and no-nonsense-at-all daughter.

Doc Carnegie: The town's sensible and sometimes sarcastic doctor.

Walter Pike Finnegan: The stuck up and slightly rich highbritches of the town and owner of the general store and bank.

Brett Chauncey: The paranoid deputy who "escorted" Drew from Cheyenne to Ruby Springs.

-Teaser Summary-


Drew Chandler has had a rough start to life. His mother left him and his father after finding that his father was formerly an outlaw, his father was killed by a rogue lawman, his foster parents and their son hated him, he ran wild on the streets of a crime-filled town, and he eventually landed himself in jail for trying to steal a horse.

It was time for a change. Not that Drew wanted (or thought he wanted) a change, in fact, he thought all he wanted was freedom and for everyone to leave him alone. But one person who heard about the sixteen-year-old boy with the questionable past decided to try and help him. Jake McCoy. Jake was the sheriff of a small ranching town in Nevada called Ruby Springs. He decided to let Drew come to Ruby Springs and try to help him make something of himself. Drew thought that was a terrible idea and fought him every step of the way. One comfort to Drew was his new-found friend, Ezekiel, an old friend of his pa whom he met on the train-ride to Elko. Inside the pages of this book, Drew will figure out that there is more to life than hate, anger, and pain, and that those things only succeed in creating a Monster.

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So that's it? I guess I'll throw links here to stuff for my novel.
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Sun Aug 06, 2017 12:53 am
AriannaC says...



How about "Time for a change" for the title? I am very bad at this, don't take my advice! XD
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Sun Aug 06, 2017 1:02 am
Virgil says...



On the Train Ride to Eiko sounds catchy to me though I'm not sure how representative that title is of the overarching story and plot. At the same time, there's not enough detail here and from looking at the teaser, there's not enough to go off of to give suggestions for the title. I'm going to suggest using a placeholder for now and then figuring it out later. I'm wondering if the part about creating a monster is literal as well? You did capitalize it, but I'm not sure.

The novel revolves around him wanting a change, right? How about a synonym to change or something like A New Beginning? Just a couple suggestions.

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Sun Aug 06, 2017 1:08 am
ChieTheWriter says...



@Kays working on a more detailed summary right now. "Monster" was capitalized for a reason, but I'm debating whether or not to keep it that way.

A New Beginning.

Ok I kind of really like that, at least as a starter.
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Sun Aug 06, 2017 6:33 am
Wolfi says...



First of all, I looove your character names. Second, I want to read this. (I know I've read some, and I think I still have a chapter to review that I've forgotten about.)

"Ruby Springs" would be cool, but only if the place was pivotal to the story. Since this is a western, I'd think it would be good to give it that western polish. Here's some titles of westerns lying around my room in case they give you any suggestions:

- Lonesome Dove
- Comanche Moon
- Haunted Mesa
- Flint
- Silver Canyon
- Buffalo Girls
- Anything For Billy
- Leaving Cheyenne
- The Last Kind Words Saloon

There isn't a western in my collection that doesn't have that dusty twang to it, if you know what I mean. Just from the titles you can tell that they're westerns. Westerns are especially defined by their rugged settings and rugged, one-of-a-kind people. You can't tell from "A New Beginning" that it's a western. For another example, the story "Legends of the Fall" is a western, but when I first heard it I thought it was some sort of epic fantasy, and I think that's off-putting and you might attract the wrong audience.
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Sun Aug 06, 2017 6:18 pm
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@Wolfical ohh you helped me there. I'm currently brainstorming.

And everyone, almost done with a sloppy summary. Feel free to ask questions if you think something isn't explained enough.
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Sun Aug 06, 2017 7:59 pm
Atticus says...



Here are a couple of my ideas:
-When I get stuck on a title, it can be nice to have some sort of small object that represents either what the character has already experienced and triumphed over, or what the character hopes to do.

Maybe Drew has some sort of toy, or action figure, or something that reminds him of a special time in his life. Or maybe he gets some sort of nickname that sticks with him. Those are just some ideas that I have for ya.
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