I started writing Knowing Gods when I was 15 years old and as such my immature writing brain decided to change from third person to first person and back again.
For example, my first chapter is the third person POV of Lucifer, then chapter 2 is the first person POV of Willow (she is the main character so the majority of the book is her POV) but it changes again to the third person POV of Adonai. I think in total there are about 5-8 chapters that are third person POV out of 32 chapters.
But as I put my work on YWS I noticed that some people didn't comment on it and others would tell me to change it. I don't know what to do about it. I mean, I make it clear who's POV it is as soon as the chapter starts so it's not confusing at least not to me.
I don't know if I should take them out because I really like the chapters and they really bring the fantasy element. I definitely don't want to change the whole thing over to third person because reviewers have told me that they love how Willow's voice comes through the writing. I could change the third person POV to first person but then there's the dilemma of letting the writer know who's POV it is.
I'm considering trying the publishing route again now I have drafted and redrafted my first three chapters but I feel like this might put off literacy agencies. That's why I need help because I don't know if it does because literacy agencies don't give feedback when they reject your work. So any help would be really appreciated because I'm so stuck and I'm hoping outside opinions will help. Thank you for your time ^_^
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