I'm just going to jump into this
I've had a story for quite awhile called Seeing is Believing, and I started the idea for the story probably about 3 or 4 years ago (maybe longer), and gradually it's changed and finally evolved into a fantasy world I'm fairly content with.
The problem is that... I just don't really know if it's a very exciting story? I keep getting stuck in the first couple of chapters, constantly rewriting them and changed one or two things, and I haven't really been able to develop it past the first four chapters. And another thing I'm consistently worrying about is being too similar to other fantasy stories and therefore even less interesting.
I have a long description that explains in short the first four chapter, but here's the explanation between three separate characters ( warning, it's long and you only have to read the first one ) ;
Sixteen years ago, Faye had an incident with something that appeared to be a ghost, and had to be taken to the hospital. Since then, she's been tentatively diagnosed with schizophrenia, and has mostly shut everyone out. Now, Faye has started to see things again, and when twins, Baltimore and Bachelor take her to what they claim to be 'an alternate reality', Faye knows there's something she's missed in between the lines.
After his little sister was taken to the hospital when he was five, Alfie has felt disconnected from her ever since. Finally, after sixteen years on and off, Faye has finally started reconnecting with her older brother. But when she has another incident in the library, Alfie knows that something is not right, especially not with all this bloody 'schizophrenia' business that Alfie doesn't believe a lick of. To make matters worse, the morning after Faye has told Alfie what happened in the library, she disappears. Now, Alfie's on a desperate mission to bring home his baby sister, but the world is changing and now, Alfie must find a way to figure out what's real and what's not, and find a way to save Faye before something drastic happens. And time is running out.
His whole life, Rei has been trained to fight and stay alive in the Rift World. Together, with his ragtag team of three other 'Rift Fighters', Dalila and the twins, Baltimore and Bachelor, he has always known how to maintain the spirits that seek to wreak havoc in the Rift World. But suddenly, things start to happen, and their mentor has sent the twins out on their first mission in a separate reality. Retrieve one of the 'Earthlings' and bring her to the Rift World. Now, the team has to work around this new member, who only seems to complicate things more than they need to be. But when the new girl starts seeing Rift Worlders that shouldn't be seen, the strange events that have been threatening the Rift World are starting to make more sense.
I'd really like to hear a response to this. Is it worth continuing? Is it too cliche? Is it 'overdone'? Is it super interesting and I need to start finishing it now? The whole plot line/dimensional rifts haven't been completely ironed out, but they're a lot more solid than before and I know how I want to end it, I just want to know if it's really worth writing.
Thank you for any feedback, I hope you have a lovely day!
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