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Tue Dec 01, 2015 6:00 pm
Kaboom says...



General Synopsis [These events occur in PT2 for my novel]

Protég = Pro-Teeg. Saylé = Say-Lee [How to pronounce the names]

The Protèg is a different type of alien. He arrives on the planet Earth and informs the Saylè that he has been searching for them throughout the cosmos. His power is enormously greater than the Saylè and he seemingly taps into a different cosmic force; whereas the Saylè tap into a cosmic power called ‘Power Eternal’. He has come to wipe Earth of the Saylè and plans to move on to other planets and exterminate their brethren. The reason being is that his people were driven out of the Universe by those who thrive on light and good, and he believes his people deserve to rule the Universe that birthed them before any other. Thus a great war ensues between the few Saylè on planet Earth versus the one, but extremely powerful being who calls himself The Protèg.

Detailed Synopsis for Book 1 PT 1:

Carlos & Aaliyah are two Saylè that reside on Earth. Carlos`s objective is to search for the Pendants Of
Leontaylè, whereas Aaliyah has grown accustomed to life on the blue planet. The two meet at an unlikely time and decide to join forces in their search for the mysterious Pendants. Their research for the locations of said Pendants takes them to a military base, where they discover yet another Pendant. But during this discovery they are attacked by another Saylè and rescued from another. Upon escaping the threat, the unknown Saylè reveals the location of another Pendant and a group of Saylè that he resides with –this location is the Rocky Mountains of British Columbia. He also reveals that they believe Aaliyah to be the one Saylè who is capable of wearing the Pendants around her neck. The three journey to this location and are met with a group of 6 Saylè, ‘Keyra, Tanner, Trance, Sierra, Mikel & Jayko’. They reveal that they have been studying to understanding their powers and abilities for some time –since their uneventful arrival on Earth; an arrival of which none remember. They have determined that their enhanced super powers are fuelled by a sort of cosmic energy and that the Saylè are able to tap into it. The amount of power each Saylè is able to tap into varies with the potential of the individual tapping into it. However, by wearing the Pendants, Aaliyah is able to reach into this power to a higher degree than anybody else. They have named this cosmic power ‘Power Eternal’. However, they also reveal that they has chosen to live in the Canadian Rockies because of the wars occurring throughout the world between Saylè & humans. Regardless, as news articles and news reports have shown, a spaceship has been located on the outer limits of the solar system. It appears to bear intelligent life and is intended to arrive sometime in the near future. Because of this, the group of Saylè have been working enormously hard to win the trust of the humans and form an alliance with them, to combat this threat. They reveal that they know that it’s a force with hostile intentions because of a radio message that the humans were able to pick-up. Summarily, because of Aaliyah’s enormous power with the Pendants of Leontaylè, they want Carlos & Aaliyah to join their forces and work together towards an alliance in preparation for this battle. Meanwhile, their current issue is a Saylè who calls himself Adrian. He was the one who attacked them at the military base a day prior and they believe that he is also searching for these Pendants. However, he is proving problematic to their objective for peace. They finally reveal that they have all the Pendants except 2. Adrian is in possession of one and the final one is nowhere to be found. Their priority is to get to it before he does –while half of the group works together with the humans to build the alliance. It`s decided that Aaliyah will help them with the alliance while Carlos helps them with locating the other Pendant. It is at this point that the two realize it`s a little difficult letting the other go.
During Aaliyahs missions with the group, she helps them feed the hungry –in different parts of the globe, combat violent Saylè and ultimately manage to make a deal with the American Government. The Saylè are willing to give them the benefits of their research about Power Eternal, in exchange for Saylè rights. The date is set and the group is waiting for Carlos and the others to return.
Meanwhile, Carlos and the others have been tracking Adrians movements. They follow him until he reaches Seoul. It is during this time that he suddenly reveals that he`s had the final Pendant the entire time. He`s lead the group so far away from the other Saylè that Carlos and his comrades are unable to receive any assistance. With that, Adrian and his group of rouge Saylè attack them. A great battle ensues with Adrian proving victorious. Additionally, Aaliyah is at home tending to business as per usual, when she decides to wear 2 Pendants at the same time. This added power enhances her senses and power by 400%. With the additional power, she can faintly sense the calamity in Seoul. So she flies as quickly as she can until she is close enough to teleport. However, she seemingly arrives too late. Carlos is on the verge of defeat while the other Saylè are already defeated. She decides to make a stand against Adrian, whom has already enhanced his power with his Pendant. Regardless of the fact that Aaliyah has 2 with her, Adrians base power was already significantly higher than her own, putting her at a massive disadvantage. After a great battle, Adrian proves victories and attempts to kill them with a massive blast that levels a majority of Seoul. Carlos manages to muster his last bit of strength and teleport them far enough away. However, it came at the last bit of his energy. He passes out and the two wake up at the Canadian Rockies. The two Pendants are safe by Aaliyah & Carlos are pretty banged up. They are informed that Jayko didn’t survive the fight in Seoul. Aaliyah ascertains that they have likely lost their chance to form an alliance with the humans, due to their inability to keep Seoul safe from Adrian. The conference is scheduled in four days time; they decide they are going to attend it anyways.
Meanwhile, Aaliyah & Carlos wish to leave the group until that time. They are uncertain what the coming days will bring and wish to spend it with one another until then. They head back to Aaliyahs apartment and spend the remaining few days there, together. At an unexpected time, Michael comes over and informs them that a few Saylè have been looking for them. They saw what happened in Seoul and have sought Aaliyah & Carlos out to help them in whatever way they can. The additional support is beneficial to their cause so they accept it without a second thought. It is at that time that the group must go back to the Canadian Rockies and rejoin their group. Having done so, the lot of them decide to use the 4 Pendants in their control as power to augment Aaliyahs capabilities. If Adrian attacks them, they will enhance her abilities as high as possible to destroy him and his allies.
The group attends the long awaited conference in an attempt to win their rights. However, due to the events of Seoul, the government is unwilling to grant them their rights as American Citizens. After the casualties of thousands of innocent civilians, they order the apprehension of all Saylè by any means necessary. Additionally, they have even located their head quarters at the Canadian Rockies and are destroying their home as they speak. They are offered an ultimatum to come quietly, or to fight and be destroyed. Conclusively, they tell them that the secrets of their research have already been taken from their head quarters and that their end of the bargain is no longer needed. The government doesn’t know about the benefits of The Pendants, so the exposure of their source of power isn’t an alarming concern. Regardless, it is at this moment that Adrian and his allies have suppressed their energies and are within range for an attack. It is in this moment that Carlos announces that they will fight for their freedom, even if it means war amongst their brethren and the human population. It is in this moment that the military forces attack the Saylè with specialized weapons that they built through the years. These weapons weaken their connection –but don’t eliminate, with Power Eternal. Adrian tells his group to focus their attacks on Aaliyah. An enhanced Aaliyah is easily overcoming the combined strength of Adrian and his comrades, and when it becomes just Adrian left, he flies to the top of the city, in a seeming fit of rage. He begins to channel his energy, threatening to destroy the city. In the last moment he teleports in front of Aaliyah and takes her by surprise. With a great blast that levels a majority of the city, he defeats her. He is quick to take control of all six Pendants himself and is surprisingly, able to wear them. After he effortlessly defeats the remaining military forces and Saylè alike, he reveals to Aaliyah & Carlos that during his time on Earth –searching for the Pendants, his travels took him to a ship. This particular ship had a message he was able to view. On it was a Saylè called Leontaylè. He was the original Saylè whom brought them to the blue planet. For whatever means are not revealed, but with them, he brought the six Pendants and left his insignia upon them. If someone was able to collect these and use them to power the ship, they could collectively take the main ship and all the others throughout the world to journey home. However, Adrian discovered that the ship was damaged, so even if he collected all the Pendants, he wouldn’t be able to power it. But that is when the incoming spaceship was detected. So he planned to defeat Aaliyah and take the Pendants to empower himself; to a degree where he would be strong enough to defeat whatever threat lingered on the outer reaches of the solar system. However, he still isn’t certain if it will be enough. So his final objective is to destroy the moon with the power provided by the collected six Pendants and throw the world into chaos –at least until the incoming threat arrives. With a world slowly ripping itself apart and collapsing, they will need a leader to turn to, especially in the face of an intergalactic war. Due to Adrian now becoming the most powerful Saylè on the planet, he views himself as such, and will lead the remaining humans and Saylè in a war to take the ships and journey home. With that, he does as promised and destroys the moon, which immediately starts to have catastrophic effects on the blue planet. Conclusively, he takes his leave and promises to see them soon.
A battered group of Saylè are all that remains in the destroyed city. Only a few of the group survived, ‘Carlos, Aaliyah, Trance & Keyra and the two random Saylè who joined their forces earlier.’ Together, they realize that the odds are against them, but they are still going to try to collect Saylè and launch an assault upon Adrian, and merge the forces with the humans. However, until that time, they take back to the mountains in Canada and hide away until the time comes.
  








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