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Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:10 am
BigBadBear says...



I believe that Kitty15 did this a while ago, and it was so terribly nice, that I just had to do it!

So,

If you are in need of a crit, (anything but lyrics, please. I can't crit those worth my life) then feel free to post the link here. I'll crit as many as I possibly can in a day because if you look over there

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I am behind 300 reviews. So, please, post as many as you want. I'll just crit as I go down the page.

Thanks for all of your hard work writing, and now go and post your links!
Just write -- the rest of life will follow.

Would love help on this.
  





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Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:13 am
Wolf says...



Awesome! :D

We all fall down
I've already gotten lot of feedback on this, but I'm still interested as to what people think because it's different form my usual writing style.

I'll only post one for now, but... xD

Cheers, and thanks so much for making this topic! You rock!

- Camille
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became everything i lost.


Would you like a review?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic73903.html
  





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Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:25 am
Sleeping Valor says...



If by need you mean 'would absolutely love' then I have 3 things you could look at.

Diary of a Villain : Prologue
topic24813.html <-This is, actually, 13 pages long in word. I broke it down into 5 parts but put them all in the same thread, so you could either read the whole thing and give me a general crit (plus there are some questions at the end that you could answer) or, since you are short crits, I wouldn't mind you doing a separate one for each part. ^_^

Diary of a Villain: Chapter 1
topic25091.html <Unfinished and in parts as well (3)

Hollow Lake : Taxi Ride
topic25246.html <Old story I did, realized how much fun I had with it so wanted some opinions. There's no crits on it right now so it's the most needy.

Thanks a bunch! Lemme know if there's anything I can crit for you.

^_^ Keek!
  





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Tue Jan 29, 2008 2:30 am
BigBadBear says...



Awesome! I'll get to work on Ayra's then I'll get to yours, Valor!!
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Tue Jan 29, 2008 3:04 am
zankoku_na_tenshi says...



Uhm... *suddenly feels extremely shy*

I could sort of use a crit too. ^_^ I suppose I'll go with the first chapter of my story, since the others probably wouldn't make sense without it. (If you're willing to do any of the chapters, of course, then you're truly awesome, and I'd love that too. But no pressure if you only want to do the first one XD)

Land of Sky, Land of Rain chapter One

It's obviously pretty rough... still needs extreme editing... but I'd be honored if you'd read it, all the same. *suddenly nervous*

Thanks so much! It's really nice of you. ^_^ I'll be sure to critique something of yours in return. (Though it might take a little while... Gah! I'm so busy. OTL Curse you, Language Arts teacher! XD)
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Tue Jan 29, 2008 3:07 am
chocoholic says...



I'd love crit's on the first three Chapter of How You Break My Heart.

Chapter 1
topic19607.html

Chapter 2
topic19984.html

Chapter 3
topic20986.html


Thanks,

choco.
*Don't expect to see me around much in the next couple of weeks. School has started again, and it'll be a couple of weeks before I've settled in. If you've asked me for a critique, you will get it, but not for a little while. Sorry*
  





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Tue Jan 29, 2008 3:17 am
BigBadBear says...



Ahh! I feel so loved!

Thanks for giving me all of these, guys. And zankoku, you can submit all you want. I would recommend it! Now I actually have something to do instead of just browsing, looking for something to crit.

And choco, thanks a ton! I'll get onto those as soon as I'm done with the others! I can't wait!

BBB

Thanks everyone!
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Tue Jan 29, 2008 4:36 am
Lindsaroo says...



Here's my chapter 1, and chapter 2 =P

topic23417.html
topic25261.html

Thanks Jared! ^_^
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Tue Jan 29, 2008 4:51 am
AWritersFantasy says...



The prologue and first chapter of my WIP could use some reviews...more so the first chapter than the prologue, but you'll need to read the prologue first (obviously, but in this case it's a bit important information-wise).

Child of Ashes: Outcast- prologue

Child of Ashes: Outcast- Chapter One: Fate Knocks

Thank you! :D
  





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Tue Jan 29, 2008 5:28 am
Gadi. says...



Wow! That is SO nice!

I feel really nice today, so I'd give you 100 points if you critique the first chapter of my story and crit it:

It's the Cousin Mary--revised! story in my portfolio.
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Tue Jan 29, 2008 5:30 am
BigBadBear says...



Thanks guys! I'll spend all day tomorrow critting my heart out.


Thanks for all of your pieces! I read/critted quite a few and they are really nice. thanks a ton!

BBB
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Thu Jan 31, 2008 3:24 pm
Sleeping Valor says...



Hollow Lake (Part 2)
topic25339.html

Just put it up, you could crit that too.=P
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Thu Jan 31, 2008 3:31 pm
Sureal says...



Hey BBB. ^_^

If you're still looking for things to review, I'd love to hear what you think of Chapter One of The Broken. :)
I wrote the above just for you.
  





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Thu Jan 31, 2008 6:45 pm
Wiggy says...



BBB, you are amazing. Thank you so much! I'll make sure I crit one of your things, too!

I'm desperately looking for some reviews on my story Hospital Nativity. If you click on my profile, it's the piece that's "advertised." :)

Thanks a gzillion, and then some!
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Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:15 am
BigBadBear says...



Hey! Thanks for submitting guys!

Ok, here are the people who I have critted:

- Ayra

- zankoku_na_tenshi

- chocoholic

- Lindsaroo

- AWritersFantasy

- gadi

- Sureal

- Wiggy

And to all of those others that I haven't, I swear on my life that you will recieve a crit today or tomorrow. I'm just so critted out... I promise that I'll get it to you.

Thanks guys! I'm still welcoming new crits! As many as you want!

BBB
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