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Wed Apr 01, 2020 12:00 am
Shadowsingercat says...



[url][user][/user][/url] So I'm writing a book where right now the protagonist has a concussion and cannot focus very well, so when the other character asks them a question their speech is slurred and sluggish, so I kinda need help trying to write them speaking as if they're about to fall unconscious or as if they've been drugged. Any suggestions?
  





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Tue Apr 14, 2020 10:58 pm
JesseWrites says...



Do you need help still? I can.
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Fri Apr 17, 2020 8:57 am
Shadowsingercat says...



I do actually, if its not too much of a bother
  





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Sat Apr 18, 2020 10:23 pm
JesseWrites says...



Slurred speech can be formed with sh taking the s position, so that it seems realistic. Maybe add a Ellipsis to give a stop. Also add some in story detail.

Ex. She felt her eyes drag as she tried to stand. The room around her was shaking and she let out a mumble, "Where am I?.. I though I was s-safe."

I hope I helped. :)
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