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I Bet You Think About Me



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Mon Dec 26, 2011 2:30 am
stargazer9927 says...



First of all, Merry Christmas everyone! Don't ask me why I decided to post this today because it has absolutely nothing to do with Christmas :P

This was supposed to be a song but I found it more like a poem so you can take it as either.



High school has come and gone
We’ve gone our separate ways
When I think about you and me,
I get a bit of a headache
We once had it all,
I swore you’d be the one
But now were standing on the other side of a wall,
And I’m thinking I should run

We were supposed to be together
It wasn’t supposed to end this way
I know you didn’t really like me,
But it seemed to me you always swayed
You never admitted it,
But from what I could see
There was something you were hiding deep down
Just admit it now,
When you’re alone at night,
You just don’t feel right
Because I bet you think about me

The story of us is contained within my many journals
All our memories are there
I don’t know what happened,
I’ve always cared
We had our date,
I had my share of happiness and heart break,
But I never thought for a minute you were just putting on a show
Because what you said and what you did,
Just didn’t seem to flow

We were supposed to be together
It wasn’t supposed to end this way
I know you didn’t really like me,
But it seemed to me you always swayed
You never admitted it,
But from what I could see
There was something you were hiding deep down
Just admit it now,
When you’re alone at night,
You just don’t feel right
Because I bet you think about me

You were in love with her,
But she didn’t like you back
Now she’s gone with just a few words to interact
We’re not children anymore,
And that night I swore I would never see you again
I was wrong, my friend
But sadly for us, this is the end

We were supposed to be together
It wasn’t supposed to end this way
I know you didn’t really like me,
But it seemed to me you always swayed
You never admitted it,
But from what I could see
There was something you were hiding deep down
Just admit it now,
When you’re alone at night,
You just don’t feel right
Because I bet you think about me

I hope your life is going well
I’ve moved on and am now taking steps to finally rich my dreams
I know you’re doing the same
I try not to think about it anymore,
But for a moment of truth,
I never stopped thinking about you

We were supposed to be together
It wasn’t supposed to end this way
I know you didn’t really like me,
But it seemed to me you always swayed
You never admitted it,
But from what I could see
There was something you were hiding deep down
Just admit it now,
When you’re alone at night,
You just don’t feel right
Because I bet you think about me
Let's eat mom.
Let's eat, mom.
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Fri Jan 06, 2012 7:26 pm
Deanie says...



Hi Stargazer!

I really liked this poem. I think of it more as a poem than a song. I think you had a very good layout and I liked how the main stanza kept getting repeated.

The story was very interesting. It was really clear and the poem is nice and simplistic.

Deanie x
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