My little Brother wrote this story and I would like him to receive some criticism or people that liked his story.
He is ten years old.
ESCAPE FROM THE
BLACK WIZARD’S
DUNGEON
I could here a hissing noise above me. I decide to fly p to the hissing noise when I saw the ladder. I went to climb it when I fell. It was a dud broken ladder. Coming towards me were six snakes. They started charging at me. I lit a fire with my powers. The fire scared all but one of the snakes. That snake and I wrestled. I threw it far away and heard the snake writher and die. I knew something else killed it above. I went up there and saw a gigantic spider, three or four times bigger than a man. I sprinted up to it and poked it in the eyes. It writhed and crawled into what sounded like water. I decided to go on, when I saw the spiders bones in water with piranhas. I knew I couldn’t jump over them. I felt in my pocket and found a plastic drinking straw. I drank all the water up with difficulty because the piranhas kept on jumping and trying to bite me. They all died without their water. Above me I saw six bats getting ready to charge. I threw a dead piranha at them and they flew away. I saw some stairs that ended the dungeon. I climbed up on them dodging bees. I got to the top, I was safe. I went a step forward and slipped on a bananna peal. I fell back in the dungeon onto a boulder and died.
THE END
