mizz-iceberg

I'm in a great hurry, so I'll quickly review this. I'll probably come back and review again. But for now: “What is wrong with you?” Keri demanded as they made ...

Is the sentence "I want to hear other opinions" part of the poem. If I don't really like it like that. I think I would have been best if you ...

You've got good emotions here but the descriptions are rather bland. Your words feel more like definitions. Thrill me, make it bold. Use more imagery, include your reader. I'm going ...

Don't Lie ~Black Eyed Peas

A friend of mine joined YWS recently. But she was inactive for quite a while so I asked her why she didn't use YWS anymore. She told me that she ...

Hey, Cara! I'm Zehra. Welcome to YWS. You can call me Mizz, Icy, Zehra whatever you please. If you have any questions or need help, feel free to PM me. ...

Hey, there Horseluver! I love horses too! =) Though I've only been on a horse about 3 or 4 times. :( Make sure you check out the Rules/Guides and FAQs. ...

Welcome to YWS, King. I'm Mizz Iceberg. You can call me Mizz, Icy, Zehra, whatever you want. If you need help or have any questions feel free to PM me. ...

Yes, Yes, That helped a lot. Thanks a million Leja! It makes more sense now and I feel I can fix this poem. I can handle it now as I ...

I really, really liked this. It made me tear up. The emotions were very vivid and overall this story really touched my heart. Still, my little heart could sense it; ...

Ok I see what you mean Leja. I understand completely what everyone's pointing at but I'm not sure HOW to fix it. If you could pin point the word that ...

*Stares at the page in front of her. Sighs, picks it up, crumples it and tosses it in the can* I see exactly what you mean by navelgazing and I ...

Vernon, you're hard to please! :lol: I can see what you mean by showing versus telling here but I do think I got the emotions across quite well. You have ...

Well then, Welcome Back! But we've already introduced ourselves. ;). See you around!

Yes I read it. It mead depressed for a two whole days. It's in my little sister's curriculum. So she had the book and as usual, an book I see ...