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Re: Crap, I think I love you.
Lovely lovely images, especially the third and fourth stanzas. I see how this is a character poem. I completely saw your character. On to the review: Because this is a ...
Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:37 pm -
Re: Always Believe
Hello, Jdmiller. I think this is a nice little poem full of many positive, beautiful ideas. On to the review: I think poetry is wonderful because you can say so ...
Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:22 pm -
Re: i'm hanging onto the silver sky
Wow! What great images. I also love the Personification of the sky, clouds, wind, and kite. You had some great great lines. For example, perhaps my favorite is "the sky ...
Tue Apr 15, 2014 4:44 am -
Re: What Am I?
Hello, I can completely relate to this poem, since I am also a musician, though not of the bass. I play the piano, and it's very true everything you've said ...
Tue Apr 15, 2014 4:32 am -
Re: The Moon
Hello, Willow. I like your poem on the moon, a wonderful subject for poetry. I thought the rhyme scheme a little strange because I'm used to the second and fourth ...
Tue Apr 15, 2014 4:23 am -
Re: Why
Hello, there! Good descriptions:) I think you really get the heart break across. Well done. On to my review. Make sure you always capitalize "I" when it's alone. "What if ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 5:31 am -
Re: What is Love?
Hello! I liked your poem very much. Very sweet. On to my review. I think the rhythm of the poem needs a little bit of work. For example, "What is ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 5:00 am -
Re: What's true. Chapter one
Hello, there. Here's my review. First of all, you use commas to separate sentences rather than periods. If you're starting a new sentence, with capitalization and everything, you need to ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 4:54 am -
Re: "Happy Birthday, Fred."
Okay, I really really loved this. I thought you did a great job, especially with the pacing. You have wonderful descriptions, and who uses words like "opalescent" anymore? Only really ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 4:46 am -
Re: Craving French Toast
Hello, there! I really like this story, lots of great details, good pacing, nice tension. I disagree with some of the other comments. This little moment in time is a ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 4:35 am -
Re: Echo
Hello, there. I like how the story is from the viewpoint of a clone, though I'm a little confused at the ending. I like it, but I think it needs ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 4:15 am -
Re: Pull the Trigger
Hello MooCow, I like this story and the images, very striking. Some smallsuggestions if I may. Second paragraph, take out the "had" from "realization that I had shot my friend" ...
Mon Apr 14, 2014 4:07 am