gabriellasloan

The first stanza was a fantastic opening. I connected immediately with your poem on a personal level. The first three lines in particular really pulled me in. This phrase "our ...

I love these kind of poems. You did a very good job. The first stanza and last are by far my favorite. The ending was kind of a surprise, but ...

I'm a nut about grammar, so let me just get it out of the way : This phrase "your grow with magic" was a little confusing. In this sentence "It ...

Nice story. There are quite a few grammatical errors. I put some below. Overall, I thought it was very interesting. I didn't really like the main character that much at ...

This was very interesting. Unique. A few grammatical mistakes, which are not fun at ALL to talk about. "Maybe she had clung to you in fear, not lust, and it ...

Perfection. So freaking well done. I loved it. It was so bittersweet. My favorite part of the story is this: "It’s so damaged, Asa,” he had whispered. “But it glows ...

I laughed at the Frogger reference. It made me laugh even though the situation was pretty gruesome. The description was amazing. I felt like I was actually there. It was ...

I was immediately hooked when I saw one of the character's name was Emma. That might seem odd, and it kind of is, but I always enjoy characters named Emma. ...

This made me really sad. At first, the character's writing seems a little forced, like they are trying to be funny or acting like they really couldn't care less. But ...

I did not expect this at all! It seemed like an entirely different story, but in a good way. I want to add that I was terrified after Castle saw ...

I really enjoyed reading the opening. I love when a character is described (especially when it's done very well like this one). At first, I wasn't really intrigued by Castle, ...

Let me first start off by saying I hate Romeo and Juliet death things, but this was an exception. It was tragic. It was a really good story - especially ...

This is hilarious. I love the tone and I died laughing many times. I really like this sentence - " My dad makes that 'dad panic' face and begins to ...

The phrase describing the room as odd didn't really connect in my mind. From the previous description, nothing stuck out as odd. I agree with SushiSashimi333 about the 'she' thing. ...

Extremely well done. From the first line I was drawn in and hooked. The metaphor comparing Alice's smile to the sun was extremely well written. The instance Evelyn's name is ...