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  • Poetry » General, Realistic
    Re: Piano

    Hello tgham99! Suggestions endlessly, / ceaselessly, First I would suggest putting these lines together. The break between them feels almost unnecessary to me and interrupts the good flow of the ...

    Feb 21, 2020

  • Poetry » Romantic, General
    Re: Stolen Waters, Stolen Kisses (poetry)

    Hello! SBG here with your review! Suggestions My first suggestion is to watch the length of your lines. The flow of your poem is generally good, but having lines that ...

    Dec 19, 2019

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Dear Earth

    Hello brookeallo! First I want to say wonderful job. This poem is quite simply amazing and it is a wake up call to everyone. You portrayed this very well. Suggestions ...

    Dec 13, 2019

  • Poetry » General, Lyrical
    Re: Dreams!!!

    Hello Bhaavya Singh! I do not wish to be critical, and all of my suggestions are with the best intentions! Suggestions A dream,that was in your heart so far. This ...

    Dec 9, 2019

  • Poetry » Humor, Realistic
    Re: How You Know Your Friends

    Hello Horisun! I will be reviewing you poem, and before I begin I just want you to know that I am not trying to be harsh nor critical, I just ...

    Dec 9, 2019

  • Poetry » Horror, Dramatic
    Re: lovebug

    Hello Anamel! I am here to help, not hurt, so I hope I am not too critical. You can take my suggestions or not, I just hope this is helpful. ...

    Dec 6, 2019

  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: My Secret Lifeline

    Hello StudentAH! Just know that I never mean to be rude or critical, and you can take my suggestions or you can't! I am in this to help you! Suggestions ...

    Dec 6, 2019

  • Poetry » Horror, General
    Re: Concrete Casket (Vol. 1)

    Hello Hereticteen! I am not trying to be rude or "picky" in my reviews, but I am only trying to help you out and suggest things to help out your ...

    Dec 6, 2019

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: Chapter One

    Hello LittleLee! I am here to return the favor as promised, I am taking a different approach to this review, but essentially I will critique the chapter in sections, and ...

    Dec 5, 2019

  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Health
    Re: How do you?

    Hello Gem!! Suggestions My First suggestion would to be to combined some of your lines. It feels very fragmented and choppy. How do you act so stupid. This is a ...

    Dec 2, 2019

  • Poetry » General, Realistic
    Re: No Title

    Hello Bellarke! Suggestions. I like how you kept the AABB rhyme scheme, but some lines feel like they were forced or they just don't flow as well. It is really ...

    Nov 26, 2019

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Of screaming silence

    Hello! Suggestions The first thing I recognize is the difference in the length of your lines, I am not sure if it is a style thing meant for impact, or ...

    Nov 15, 2019

  • Poetry » Health, General
    Re: A Poets Sacrifice

    Hello MiniGem! Initial Thoughts I really like the formatting of the italicized and bolded words which made it really nice to know which ones to stress and portrayed the emotion ...

    Nov 14, 2019

  • Poetry » Fanfiction, General
    Re: supernatural is

    Hello Jaybird! walking over autumn leaves in forgotten forests in search of the monsters underneath suburban beds. just the wilderness, two brothers and a notebook messy with the notes of ...

    Nov 14, 2019

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Fantasy
    Re: The God of War

    Hello Nymeria! Your imagery is absolutely fantastic I must say. This story was really nice to hear, and I love that you used the real God of War with the ...

    Nov 14, 2019


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