Schemilix

Hmm... Seems like a good verse to put in a song, but maybe not so powerful on its own. I do like the ending and first lines though, though the ...

OH! I like this a lot! Very original concept, and good usage of repetition on the ending lines. I take it you like the colour black? The ending line is ...

Wow, my first impression of this was definitely a good one. Nice rythm, doesn't stray from it much, the rhyming for the most part is natural, which I know is ...