Nightlyowl

Thanks! I did have the stanza's broken up into groups of four lines... but for some reason it didn't post it that way. And I tried to fix it three ...

This is beautifully written. Well done. ~Nightlyowl

Why thank you! This is "chapter" 2 and so far I have 3 out. As for the random exploding, it might have made more sense if you had read the ...

I really love this poem. ^.^

Wow... That was great! I mean I don't know how to you know... review music, so I guess this is just a comment. But anyways, I really liked this. I ...

Black birds tend to symbolize Death. And being she's dead in this, I put that in there at the end. I hope that clarifies it for you. ^.^

Oh god! I didn't mean to make it sound like that's what I thought you were doing... I'm so sorry if it came out that way... I was just saying ...

It was very helpful! Thanks! I did write it like her noticing all the details for a reason... she's a bit... strange after all. Haha. But I know what you ...

Hahah! Oh yes, totally. Very morbid.

Thanks! I'll be sure to keep analogy open for another poem. I have tended to make both my stories and my poems recently, short and choppy. Not this short or ...

Oh my god, very emotional very good... just... just wow I don't know what else to say. Great poem. Five owls out of five. ~Nightlyowl

This is a very moving and touching poem. Though the flow isn't consistent, the meaning behind the words is strong. And though flow is important, I feel like the meaning ...

Hi there! I liked the idea of this poem though I agree that you should revise it grammatically. The first five lines flow very well, but from the sixth line ...

Yea, I did change the "I" thing and the repeating thing, but for some reason after I edit it it doesn't stay that way. Haha. ^.^ Thanks