Lauren

Hi sparrowrules ! Lovely to meet you, I'm Lauren. I'm glad this is only a first draft, for two reasons: 1) It is just glittering with potential and loveliness. 2) ...

Hi Rosey Unicorn! Nice to meet you at last xD [My Overall Impressions] I'm so glad this was not cliche-ridden. It was, thankfully, original and very cute. There needs to ...

XxxDo, this is lovely contemplative fiction. I sense it is based on a real person? I can think of nothing erring in the body of text itself. The subject, the ...

The word is bandied around a bit too much on this site, but this really was beautiful . The beauty did not merely lie in the topic, but most of ...

It was a bit choppy, but then again it's a memory so it wouldn't too detailed. I liked it-- Mr O'Connor had a voice (a real voice) and that's vital. ...

Hi :] please keep in mind that this is only loosely following the fairytale, Cinderella. Loosely. Very loosely. The thing is, it doesn't seem like it... even loosely. The part ...

Hi :D I love pretty writing... only problem is that sometimes I have no idea what's going on. I'm a pleb when it comes to vocabulary. **opens up dictionary.com** The ...

Hmm... this wasn't my cup of tea. I mean, I'm not saying it was bad---it was quite good, at first. However, repetitive or what? IMO, it should have been half ...

Where Part 2 suffered, this certainly has been a return to form! Loved it, loved it! Had me on tenterhooks the while time. The dialogue was perfect, the characters comical ...

Sorry this is a bit late. Anyhow, I'm impressed. I hope this new fellow is not going to be be too predictable... :) As much as I liked this, there ...

I liked it a lot. There was a lot of "telling, not showing" here---but I don't think that's an issue in this case. The anger and resentment came across superbly, ...

:) I really enjoyed reading this. It was sensitive and subtle. I'd prejudged it as angsty but it wasn't. Loved the introduction and the way you structured it--the tone was ...

Hey. Here's the thing: it was good. But, something about it seemed a bit tired. A bit, well, cliched. It wasn't so much the suicidal man jumping off the building ...

A sad, bittersweet piece of 'microfiction', mtempleton :) Isn't it annoying when they give you a word limit? Completely stifles creativity. Still, for what it was, you worked it well. ...

It’s strange that first time you feel something close to love. It doesn’t happen straight away and it isn’t love until you’ve acted in it[s]’[/s]s grave play I like this ...