Lauren

Hello :wink: I won't echo Saint Razorblade's nit-picks, I will merely comment in an over-all sorta way. It's very, er, descriptive. You seem to analyse each and every thing that ...

Hello there! :) For years now she had cared For years now, she had cared Although that is often a matter of opinion... Commas are never obligitory in some cases, ...

Hi. I think this is really well done - Henry has a true personality, we can see that, rather than appearing one-sided merely to fit the protagnist. One thing though ...

Good good. This was interesting stuff. It could possibly, maybe, perhaps do with a tad more description as it is action, action, action, but that is simply a matter of ...

Awh, I really liked this, it was ... touching. You know, because everyone wants to still be in love when they're old and all. Well, I see what you set ...

Hi. I like this a lot - I read it all the way through without getting bored or anything. It is, as said, fresh in tone and description. I like ...

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Hi. I think it was interesting, quite good in fact, but after a while, I'm afraid it got a bit, well, prolonged. It soon felt as though I was reading ...

Thea!! I never knew you had such a talent for writing. No fair! It was really good, Thea. Your vocabulary was especially varied. There is no repetition and you carry ...

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Read this a while back when I had not distinguished any particular taste :smt053 Sorry to say I found it puerile, unoriginal, monotonous... and the rest. Thumbs down from me.

Very well-written, I must say! I think you've really set the mood with this - it is very mature-sounding, not to mention subtle and poetic. Question is, can you keep ...

Wow, wow, wow! This was great! I did not tire of it one bit and was disappointed when I reached the end. Honestly, I think this has great potential. I ...

Hi. First off, I would like to say that it reminds me of something the fabulous Jennifer Donnelly would write (and that's no insult). Well, back to the text itself: ...

Hello :) I thought this was pretty good - it works well to draw us in. Your descriptions are well constructed, too. However, it is so, so short :( Perhaps ...