Lauren

Whisperer, you've got some good ideas but some things are seriously holding you back. That's unfortunate because I can see the potential just waiting to come through. Let me just ...

Thank you both; you are both very kind :D To ashleylee: Markus is the man who wrote the letter. He wrote it to Sybil, who is the one that cries ...

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Hi. Though you have not reviewed anyone, I'll still review because I was in the same boat a month or less back. Anyway, nice to meet you! Here we go: ...

Hi, Claire. I'm glad you posted. This was your coursework from last year, no? I'm impressed, you'll be claiming-indifference-but-secretly-pleased to know. Okay, so you've still some issues with the la

Hi. I like it, I think it's a 'nifty' idea. The tone, too, was realistic and was effective in giving the character a so-called air. There was one typo I ...

This is quite dramatic stuff, Thea. I like it, but it is no as strong as your other story. This one's weaker because it relies too much on feelings, rather ...

Ah, thank 'ee, Thea. With regards to the age thing, I'm pretty sure I hinted; I'm sure I said she was twenty... I shall check that. Later. Anyway, thanks for ...

Hi, Bittersweet. I liked this immensely. It was delicate and intruiging, sad and poetic without falling into depressing. In a way, it was reasonably uplifting. Kudos to you! L

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First of all, hello! Second, I would just like to say that you are great with imagery. (Woot!) Here is an example: The rain pelts against the window like bullets ...

Sorry, I'm new here: are you allowed to quote a critiquer? :? Obviously – being American – you have spelt colour wrong. Is it wrong? Surely it's just a variation? ...

I liked this, though it is not to my typical taste. I think you started out with some effective descriptions. E.g. (a memorable one) abundant with twinkling stars and a ...

Hi! I thought this was very good. You have a knack for creating tense moments, eh? For a short story it had good impact - it did not seem rushed ...

Hello :) Well, it's clear straight away that you have some issues with grammar, spelling and the ol' punctuation (or maybe it was a one-off thing), however, I will ignore ...