Young Writers Society

I've written a Haiku! Could you please check it out and tear it to shreads? lol...It's called Outlived in other poetry. Thanks, K
~ Alia

It's not that I think they're spent or anyone is a fool to use them, on the contrary I'm impressed when people who know better or possess a certain amount of ability do so anyway. I'll message you shortly.

Thanks so much for the review Karzkin! I never knew any of those elements of a haiku as my LA class didn't say anything then the way the syllables should be arranged in the lines... So, thanks

Not all rhymes, definitely not, but 95% of rhymes in poems are awful or simply nothing spectacular. The reasons for this are many, one particular one being that rhyme was once THE THING in all of writing, poetry once being the highest branch of writing, and so people have basically done everything they possibly could with rhyme and then some. You have to shape the rhyme with culture today, and more importantly language today, to make it an interesting addition to a poem.

There are many examples of famous poems that utilize their culture, time, and identity with rhyme without becoming tedious. I can send them in a message if you like.

From my perspective, the speaker's legs had turned to cellulose (one of the components of wood/plant cells), suggesting that he had become stuck or rooted in the place where he wasn't happy. His carving of his legs into oars was his way of breaking free from the land and going out to sea, the place he had been dreaming of.
I'm always hesitant to give explanations to people, because I like to hear what they pulled from a work on their own, so if you were thinking of a different explanation, I'd love to hear it

Sure, no problem-o.

It's not a problem, share with me whenever you like. I can give a much deeper reading of basically anything if you prefer, just ask me when and where.

You're an amazing poet!
Great job with all of your works
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Thank you for you review!!!

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