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  • AmeliaCogin
    Jun 18, 2011

    I've written a Haiku! Could you please check it out and tear it to shreads? lol...It's called Outlived in other poetry. Thanks, K
    ~ Alia


  • MeanMrMustard
    Jun 8, 2011

    It's not that I think they're spent or anyone is a fool to use them, on the contrary I'm impressed when people who know better or possess a certain amount of ability do so anyway. I'll message you shortly.


  • Justagirl
    Jun 8, 2011

    Thanks so much for the review Karzkin! I never knew any of those elements of a haiku as my LA class didn't say anything then the way the syllables should be arranged in the lines... So, thanks ;)


  • MeanMrMustard
    Jun 8, 2011

    Not all rhymes, definitely not, but 95% of rhymes in poems are awful or simply nothing spectacular. The reasons for this are many, one particular one being that rhyme was once THE THING in all of writing, poetry once being the highest branch of writing, and so people have basically done everything they possibly could with rhyme and then some. You have to shape the rhyme with culture today, and more importantly language today, to make it an interesting addition to a poem.

    There are many examples of famous poems that utilize their culture, time, and identity with rhyme without becoming tedious. I can send them in a message if you like.


  • Nightshade
    Jun 7, 2011

    From my perspective, the speaker's legs had turned to cellulose (one of the components of wood/plant cells), suggesting that he had become stuck or rooted in the place where he wasn't happy. His carving of his legs into oars was his way of breaking free from the land and going out to sea, the place he had been dreaming of.
    I'm always hesitant to give explanations to people, because I like to hear what they pulled from a work on their own, so if you were thinking of a different explanation, I'd love to hear it :)


    Karzkin Ah, thank you very much. No, I like your explanation much better :P
    Jun 7, 2011


  • Dragongirl
    Jun 4, 2011

    Sure, no problem-o.:)


  • MeanMrMustard
    Jun 4, 2011

    It's not a problem, share with me whenever you like. I can give a much deeper reading of basically anything if you prefer, just ask me when and where.


  • Justagirl
    Jun 1, 2011

    You're an amazing poet!
    Great job with all of your works :D
    *Follows*


    Karzkin Thank you very much. I truly am flattered :)
    Jun 1, 2011

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    lele253isme
    May 29, 2011

    Thank you for you review!!!


    Karzkin You're very welcome :) I enjoyed reading your piece.
    May 29, 2011

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    lele253isme Glad you did!!
    May 29, 2011


  • Justagirl
    May 28, 2011

    Hi!! Welcome to YWS! Feel free to ask anyone a question, most of us don't bite(and when we do it's just slobbery puppy nibbling). If someone does bite you hold their nose while shouting "OFF!". Hopefully I haven't scared you. Welcome!


    Karzkin Thank you very much :) If everyone here is as nice as you I think I'm going to enjoy myself here.
    May 28, 2011


    Justagirl Why thank you! :)
    Have a great time on YWS!

    May 28, 2011



Between living and dreaming there is a third thing. Guess it.
— Antonio Machado