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  • carbonCore
    Mar 9, 2013

    Meh. I just. You know.

    and as I see by your status update, you aren't much better. :p

  • carbonCore
    Mar 6, 2013

    Ugh. Isn't he? The letter is difficult to read; I find I can connect to a lot of it.

  • carbonCore
    Mar 5, 2013

    Have you read Letter to His Father?

  • Twinkle4ever
    Mar 3, 2013

    Nah, it's actually just a rough piece. I have few other chapters but I'm not sure if I should carry on further with it. But I"ll add what you said and if my writers block goes away I'll continue on with it. :)

  • Twinkle4ever
    Mar 3, 2013

    thanks so much for the review. I'll take note of all those things. :) But there is one thing i'd like to state that it will be found out in the first chapter about how she was living like this and how her dream taught her things. (firstly she's not human. things will be cleared soon enough) But thanks a lot. i'll try to make some changes. :)

  • Excellent writing Kafka, your poetry received an honorable mention. Congrats! http://likegif.com/wp-content/uploads/2 ... -gif-7.gif

  • Glauke
    Feb 23, 2013

    Yeah, I can understand that. It's still really cool though.

  • Glauke
    Feb 23, 2013

    Hi. Just wanted to say that I like your 4D museum :)

  • Kafkaescence
    Feb 22, 2013

    depressed. i'll take it all out on the upcoming review day, haha.

    Jiggity Depression is awful. Don't be afraid to reach out if you need to - I'm certainly available for a chat, whenever necessary. Just let me know.
    Feb 23, 2013

  • Tigersprite
    Feb 21, 2013

    No no, critical was what I was looking for. Good steel needs to be tempered by fire, right? ;) And thanks, I just saw your recommendation in Literary Gems. :) Definitely planning on sticking around, and like I said before--tell me if you need anything reviewed!

  • Tigersprite
    Feb 20, 2013

    I don't think you have given me a full review before, but the one you just did was very useful. ;) Thank you for it, really. I completely understand what you mean about the vagueness and the missed opportunities. I think the problem is me having written without an audience for so long--I'm assuming the reader knows what I do, which they obviously don't. In other words, that's a problem which needs to be fixed, and which I can and mostly certainly will. And that ending was bad editing--it goes on into a conversation, but I cut the excerpt out strangely from the actual first chapter so it just looks rather awkward. Nevertheless, I'm sure I can find easier ways of integrating it into a revised scene. And before I completely spam your wall, I'll just reiterate my thanks: thank you! A favour for a favour, so if you ever need anything of yours reviewed just let me know. Hopefully I'll be sticking around for a while yet. :)

  • FallingFromGrace
    Feb 19, 2013

    I want to thank you for your very helpful review. I'm going to start trying that rhyme technique.

  • i can never bring myself to critique a deeply personal piece. don't want to hit a nerve.

    Searria H. That's always touchy. I usually PM the author to ask how they want it to be critiqued, if at all. I feel a little better then, but still... :)
    Feb 12, 2013

    carbonCore If they don't want to hear harsh words about their work, they shouldn't make it available to read for others. I insist on being honest no matter what. Honest reviews of my most personal work, Professor Morgenstern, also made it my best work. If I recall correctly, yours was among the reviews that made it shine. As such, I'm sorry to hear that you're softening to other personal pieces and depriving them of your excellent critiques.
    Feb 20, 2013

  • joshuapaul
    Feb 11, 2013

    You're going to have to send me the Labyrinth manuscript that I know you have completed by now.

  • fireheartedkaratepup
    Jan 30, 2013

    OH. Ok. Things make more sense now.

    ....thank you for being so nice after I spilled all over you story.

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