Young Writers Society

Firstly, here's a few spelling/grammatical corrections: I've kinda had this sitting around waiting to be finished for a while and just finished it, so, tell me what you think... In ...

Hi, I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but the punctuation at the end of each line was irregularly distitributed. In fact, it was barely existent. Personally I ...

Hi, This was a really nice read. I do agree to an extent with storyweaver that you probably shouldn't rely too much on a rhyme scheme. However, I think it ...

I think most people can probably identify with this. When a person knows a friend for a long period of time, they begin to expect things of them, they attach ...

Hello, This was good, but I couldn't help notice the number of syllables in each line; it is usually ten, but occasionally I found some lines with nine or eleven ...

Hello, I'm assuming this is about World War 2, and more specifically about D-Day? It's good, I don't have a lot to criticise, but you mentioned 'protect the Queen' somewhere; ...

The short lines of this poem are quite peculiar. At first, I thought it was a bit silly, but actually I think it works quite well with the subject matter; ...

Hello, Luckily for you I prefer complimenting people to destroying their self-esteem, so here goes: I found this poem quite powerful as an expression of the pain and loss of ...

I thought this read well as a series of rhyming couplets, although this bit seemed a bit odd to me: Whoever’s around, To their story I’m bound. For I know ...

This sounds like it could be the beginning of an interesting story (is it a stand-alone short story or part of a longer story? It's worth making that clear when ...

Hi, I was going to review this as request, but I didn't have much time to do so yesterday and it seems everyone else beat me to it. I'll try ...

I thought this was good, though I don't really understand what is going on - I'm assuming that the main purpose of this part of the story is to introduce ...

I'm assuming this isn't intended to be the beginning of the story? If it is, then I have to say it is a bit confusing - who are Andrea and ...

This was a good attempt, but personally I found it a bit mediocre and "samey". There's a nice rhythm in this poem, enhanced by your use of rhyme, but I'd ...

I can't honestly say I understood this, but that doesn't stop me from liking this. I liked your use of archaic language (making the modern wording of the final stanza ...