EloquentDragon

Yep, most of the stuff I pointed out were probably just typos. ;) Definitely expand on this, and keep writing!

Yep, most of the stuff I pointed out were probably just typos. ;) Definitely expand on this, and keep writing!

Well yes, I did notice that Lorin's "weak" character was intentional later on, I must have forgotten that I had those comments earlier and didn't go back and change them. ...

Agreeing and disagreeing? (How is that even possible, I wonder...) But no, after I posted all this I saw the "part 2" and I was like, "oh, okay." So that ...

Sure, free of use. Glad you liked it. I took a lot longer than I probably should have, but take what I said (mainly about believability and description) and apply ...

Eh well, poetry is by nature largely introverted, but I wouldn't call this poem here "arrogant," just a bit unrefined. Hope I had some useful comments for ya.

Oh well, as I said, not really much of a review. Glad you finally saw it though. ;)

You should send me some links to what you want reviewed. I'd be willing to do a few. (I actually have a review thread around here somewhere too... but no ...

Ah, the last thing I forgot to add was to cut out those caps. xD

I promise you a review when I get the time. (maybe tommorow, tonight?)

Trying to achieve narrative distance without grammatical helps is self-defeating. And no, the reader won't notice it as being an "authorial interjection." There is no psychological incongruity, you ca

Epilogue? Wouldn't that defeat the purpose of it being a short then? Anyway, glad you liked it.

Epilogue? Wouldn't that defeat the purpose of it being a short then? Anyway, glad you liked it.

Oh hey! Thanks for commenting on this. I'm glad you liked it.

There should be no such thing as "revealing" a plot to a reader. The plot should progress on its own, naturally. The reader is just along for the ride. And ...