EloquentDragon

Thanks. Yeah, if there's one thing I hate as a writer, it's word count. I wanted to do a lot more in regards to setting up Brody, making you wonder ...

Yeah, I really hated the ending myself, but I was forced to wrap things up where they stood. The thing about the police is true, I mostly just added them ...

Depends on what gun you're talking about here. Rifle? You got the long range and BMG. Those do pack a lot of punch, but keep in mind what I said ...

Go to where it says "publishing center," click on the work you want to edit, and you can change it from there.

With names, in fantasy, try to stay close to names that we are familiar with in the real world. At least pick names that are familiar to our real world ...

Just so you know, I got an ad for "End world hunger" after this. xD But on a serious note, the thought does count. This was great.

Reviewed badly? Mean, I thought this was bad or they are in bad need of reviews? heh. I didn't think this was bad though, just rough. You should refine it, ...

You still need to capitalize all of the "I's," "I" not "i." Make sure you read through this again.

Bwah ha ha ha ha. I read "fourth" and "beer" together in my mind for some reason. "Heather, bring forth another beer!" ROFL

not incorrect. "Su" means "your." "Tuyo" can also be used, but the two are often exchanged in usage.

Well, not a total flop, but largely idiosyncratic. I liked the style, but I do believe you should try and follow a more logical sequence of events.

ROFL

Oh, heh. I re-read that just now and realize that well, this isn't actually all that great. I should expand it though, I really should... you should read my "Mi ...

Ah, I see. Yes falling stars are beautiful. But the imagery can still seem a bit meloncholy, especially when paired with "weeping." But please don't misunderstand me here, this WAS ...

What didn't you agree with? The vocab choice?