EloquentDragon

ED here to review! First off, I am going to make a huge assumption here and guess that this is meant to be classified under “historical fiction.” Now, it doesn’t ...

ED here, hopefully I can be of some help. First of all, this is 16 pages long! I realize that this is about the normal length for a novel chapter, ...

ED here to review, I’m going to jump right in. This has some nice tension here. The action moves swiftly, and for the most part we know exactly what’s happening. ...

Hey there mate! ED here to review. (Yes, I did notice the intermittent black and gray text… kind of makes you dizzy if you scroll up and down, up and ...

Well, can I just say how refreshing it is to see a short story on here every once in a while? This is excellently done. I loved it, and it’s ...

EloquentDragon here to review. Now, first off, if you’re looking for more reviews you might get more luck if you post long chapters like this in two parts. YWS, like ...

Hey there, ED here to review. Nitpicks are contained in the spoilers: We were heading toward a drunken stupor ourselves; but at a slower pace than our elders. This is ...

First of all, this has great potential. There is power here, and there is raw emotion. Great job. However, I think that this could be taken farther, be made better. ...

ED here to review! First of all, I liked this. You did a great job with such an interesting and atypical premise. It has color. (;) ) That being said, ...

This is something that hits very close to home with me as well. One of my coworkers was epiliptic, and a girl in my class who I'm friends with. I'm ...

Aw sweet, a screenplay! FYI, I've been into filmmaking since I was 13, and have a few SPs under my belt as well. So hopefully I'll be able to give ...

Well, hey there 22. ED here to review. First off: Your concept here sounds interesting. Something a bit different than the norm. It looks promising... expand on this! That being ...

I'm back, as per request. *Rubs hands together with a sinister grin.* (Well, okay, maybe not "sinister") I'm diving right in here without further ado. I hope this helps. Sorry ...

First of all... I am so terribly, terribly sorry that I didn't get this in to you sooner. I have been incredibly busy lately and was gone for a week. ...

Hey there! This is really very good. It is dark, and it is visual. However, I didn't find it very personal. Relate this to YOU, what is it that makes ...