EloquentDragon

Elo here to review, hope I can help! (Ooh! Historical fiction! *Rubs hands in excitement) First of all, you seem to have an interesting idea here. Which is good! It’s ...

Hey there, ED here to review First off, I really loved the originality of this piece. Also the broad use of more extensive vocabulary, (Note my user name, heh) That ...

ED here to review, first of all---I love your avatar. Heh. Anyways.... This section bugged me to no end: 'I was sent here from Akhaïa by the Academy fifteen years ...

Hey, ED here to review... First off, this is the only section that really bugged me: "Rayne’s throat had gone dry and she felt a cloud begin to drift over ...

Wow, you honestly put a lot of effort into this, I was captivated for every second. You deserved that reward. My very little peices of advice: Try to vary your ...

This one section here stood out to me, the break of the train of thoughts between paragraphs is jarring: Cole Lancewood had never been the slightest interested in plant life ...

Well, ED here to review. If I'm going to review something I'm going to go all out, so please don't take my comments too personally as I tend to be ...

Ah, I see you took up the challenge! (great job, BTW) I'll try and be brief(er) here then I was for chapter one. First off, you need to decide who's ...

I suppose I’m here for chapter two… I’ll skip all pleasantries and get right down to business then. Dionysus opened his eyes. The god looked his right, his long, unkempt ...

EloquentDragon here to review, as per request. To start things off, this seems like a rather interesting proposition you have here for your story. If I am not mistaken, it ...

ED here to review, hope I can help with this rather daunting project. First of all… break your chapters up here! This is a very, very long submission--- post your ...

ED here to review again. I’ve put the nitpicks regarding your sentence structures in the spoiler below. Renjin stayed in bed for what seemed like hours, staring upwards, thinking of ...

Alright, I’m here to review. I didn’t read the previous chapters, but I’m sure all tips and advice given are relevant. Please do not be dismayed by length--- I’m a ...

I'll be brutal here, but please don't take this the wrong way. *AHEM NOTE: I am only familiar with movie pitches, but since this world happens to be the most ...

ED here. I’ll be reviewing your work here today. I nitpick a lot, so I broke it up into parts for you. Hope this helps! PART ONE: I didn't have ...