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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: A Mother's Love

    This is really a beautiful poem! One thing in this universe was always there and always was A mother’s love for her daughter A really good way to start everything ...

    Dec 2, 2012

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Half Asleep

    Well, this is- really good. It's very unique, I was lost at some points, wondering where you were going with this, and what the point of the story was, but ...

    Sep 3, 2012

  • Short Story » Realistic, General
    Re: Deleted

    Well, Stigma already said the problem with this: it's too blocky. Try seperating it into smaller paragraphs, ten lines is usually a good amount for a paragraph. Anyway, I think ...

    Sep 3, 2012

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Chapter Three-Part Two

    Well, this just gets better and better. It's strange... because I generally only get interested with supernatural stories. But you have me drawn right it! I can't wait for the ...

    Sep 3, 2012

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: Chapter Three-Part One

    Wow, this is a really good start! I'm going to review this and part 2 seperate since they are really long. First things first, I think you should split this ...

    Sep 2, 2012

  • Poetry » Horror, Fantasy
    Re: My House of Cards

    Interesting. Never heard anything like this before. I liked it! :D The wallpaper's filled with clubs and hearts, That make a certain kind of art. Good way to start... It ...

    Sep 2, 2012

  • Article / Essay » Other, General
    Re: -

    This is good, if a slight heavy on words. You have bunched too much information into one sentence and it gets confusing... It was another lonely morning when I was ...

    Aug 31, 2012

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Supernatural
    Re: Red roses hurts the most - Chapter 1

    Well, wow. This is awesome. You had me speed-reading because I wanted to collect all the info as soon as I could. It was like I got lost in the ...

    Aug 30, 2012

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: Volume 1

    This is really quite the interesting piece of work, I must say. I am not too clear on who the target audience of this piece is... Can you make this ...

    Aug 29, 2012

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Antimatter

    Very good rhyming scheme. Everything fits together really good. scarletcurlicue has a point though, how is loved fueled by hatred? can you make this clear please. Its a interesting view ...

    Aug 28, 2012

  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical
    Re: Your eyes...

    Short and sweet. It's really good. Really good details, although you got me slightly confused where you say "Sands, that swim around, beautifully blue" Are you saying this character has ...

    Aug 28, 2012

  • Short Story » Romantic, Other
    Re: Coffee Stains

    I love this. It's really captivating! How she is comparing him to how he is now, to how he was when he was a kid, and actually realising it for ...

    Aug 13, 2012

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Summer of Savages

    I had to stop reading this halfway through. TOO MUCH SWEARING! Unless this kid has terrettes, there is no need to have a swear word in practically every sentence! Okay, ...

    Aug 7, 2012

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Other
    Re: A Whispered Lullaby

    I like this, it's short but still holds your attention very well. It's kind of a mystry, i can't figure out what the message or meaning behind the poem is, ...

    Aug 6, 2012

  • Short Story » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: I Imagined Death

    I love this. It is a really good piece. I was absolutely captivated when i started reading, i am just marvelled. You are seriously one of the best writers on ...

    Aug 6, 2012


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