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  • HibiscusBlush
    Jul 2, 2011

    Happy Birthday =) 'Hope your day is great! I'm Ceely, by the way, nice to meet ya.


    ChocolateMoonLight Thanks a lot !!! I'm ruhi, nice to meet you too...
    Jul 3, 2011


  • theotherone
    Jul 2, 2011

    Thanks for the review. :) I would like though that you tell me a little bit about what you though of it... It's always good to know what is good and bad in your story so you can work on it. ;)

    The next chapter should be up tonight at the latest. :)


  • EloquentDragon
    Jul 1, 2011

    Thanks for the review...
    Yes, I'm seriously considering turning it into a novel...eventually...


    ChocolateMoonLight Hey PM me whenever you do it, I would love to read the whole version...!!!!
    Jul 2, 2011


  • Lava
    Jun 1, 2011

    :O
    Roohster! The name change confused me


    ChocolateMoonLight Now you know, right?
    Jun 2, 2011


    Lava ;)
    Jun 2, 2011


  • iampaulop
    May 31, 2011

    You're welcome. Just what I thought. She is running away from her father :)


    ChocolateMoonLight It's a relieve to know that you even understood it...:-) :-)
    May 31, 2011


    iampaulop ahaha... Can u review my work? Thanks, I have a problem with my grammar so I hope you can help me... Reomi:prologue[new] ... dont open the first one, that's a waste :) hehe
    May 31, 2011


  • fireheartedkaratepup
    May 25, 2011

    By the way, just wanted to let you know--I liked the pictures you posted on DC fans. I'm just looking for pictures that depict the heroes a whole, like a close-up of a mask or something.


  • Lava
    May 22, 2011

    hey rooh! The train was earlier than I thought. I'll review once I get a comp with internet.


  • MadameLuxestrange
    May 21, 2011

    Thank you for the review!


    ChocolateMoonLight Hey! That's what we do here right and you can ask for a review anytime you want.
    Keep Writing...
    -rooh-
    May 22, 2011


  • MiaParamore
    May 17, 2011

    You're welcome. I am glad that it was helpful. That's what I really wanted, and it's an honor if somebody benefited from my article. I am not going to be online for a month, so I'll review your thing if you post it before that. :wink:

    Peace,
    Shrubs


  • ankitjain
    May 9, 2011

    Thanks a lot for review. I really appreciate it. :)
    You're kidding right?!?.. Of course, I am on Fakebook.. Opps!.. Facebook.. Why don't you provide me your link? I'll add you there, if you want me to..
    If you'f like to read further chapter then, please check following links:
    Chapter 3: topic80646.html
    Chapter 4 : topic80647.html


  • ankitjain
    May 7, 2011

    Will please critique my work?
    Check it out!
    topic80552.html


  • ankitjain
    May 7, 2011

    Will you please critique my work.
    Check it out!
    topic80552.html


  • ankitjain
    May 7, 2011

    Will please critique my work?
    Check it out!
    topic80552.html


  • ankitjain
    May 7, 2011

    Will please critique my work. Is desperately needs some good critiques.
    Check it out!
    topic80552.html


  • eldEr
    May 5, 2011

    Haha, you're welcome. ^^



It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien