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    Re: The Other Chick

    Ey up, Shiksha. I have to admit that when I saw the title for this my initial reaction was to roll my eyes -- I expected it to fall into ...

    Sun Jun 29, 2014 1:19 am

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: With Revisions: The Deal Will Live

    Ey up, Uniuqe. I feel like what you here right now is an idea, and it's one that could be pretty interesting but there's a lot more that you can ...

    Sun Jun 22, 2014 10:14 pm

  • Short Story » Realistic, General
    Re: Pink Coats and Cottonwood Seeds

    Yo Fortis, you have a good few constructive comments on this already, so I'm gonna try and keep it brief. I like what you've got going here, the image is ...

    Sun Jun 22, 2014 9:10 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: A Story in Black and White

    Hey ho, Walker! Like dudette, I tihnk the main problem I have here is defining the relationship between the he and the she. Some of the descriptions, the glasses at ...

    Tue Nov 29, 2011 12:37 am

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Hunted

    'Ello 'ello! :D It seemed as if Mother Nature knew that something terrible had just happened, and now the world was in mourning. Or perhaps it was just me. You ...

    Mon Nov 28, 2011 11:44 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Forty Degrees Celsium - Chapter 1

    Hello there, Shinda! The first paragraph of a novel is probably one of the most important, it's the thing that's got to hook us, lure us in to read more, ...

    Sun Nov 27, 2011 2:15 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Numbers - Ch1

    Hello there, Shinda! Science fiction is my guilty pleasure, and I've decided to indulge myself ;D Some nitpicks and small things, to begin with: not to mention the strange colors; ...

    Sat Oct 15, 2011 8:50 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: The Sky is Beautiful

    Hey PSW, it's been a while, no? ;D I think this is pretty interesting, but some of the phrases feel a little... Stilted? As if they're being put in a ...

    Sat Oct 15, 2011 8:10 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: two crescent moons 1.2

    'Ello Stella! You said you had some great reviews on the first part of this (and so you do!) so I thought I'd mosey on down to this part ;D ...

    Sat Oct 15, 2011 2:46 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Snow White

    Hi, skintightgenes! I see you're new around these parts, why no pop over to the welcome mat and say hello :D As Leahweird says, short does not equal uninteresting, and ...

    Thu Oct 13, 2011 8:20 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Just me

    Hey dasiamari! At the moment, this doesn't really read much like a story -- it really does feel a lot like a diary entry. The thing is though, not an ...

    Wed Oct 12, 2011 12:19 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Practice Makes Perfect

    Hi, Sionarama! Her breathing was rough and shaky as tears streak her chubby cheeks. A small something to begin with, as the story is set in the past tense, that ...

    Wed Oct 12, 2011 11:31 am

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: White Carpet

    Hello there, amygabb! It's been a while since I've reviewed anything, so apologies for being out of practice! some bits and pieces to begin with: I crawl along the fence ...

    Tue Oct 11, 2011 10:46 pm

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Conventions of an Innocent Toilet

    Hi Hayes! It makes me wonder though, do comics that think they’re funny actually sound funny? That would make laughter and jokes a constant drum in their hearts. Supermodels that ...

    Sat Jul 23, 2011 2:08 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Gypsy

    Hi retrodisco! :D I'm from the same side neck o' the woods as you, so relevant question -- did you catch Channel 4's My Big Fat Gypsy Wedding ? If ...

    Sat Jul 02, 2011 9:12 pm

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