Young Writers Society

Ey up, Shiksha. I have to admit that when I saw the title for this my initial reaction was to roll my eyes -- I expected it to fall into ...

Ey up, Uniuqe. I feel like what you here right now is an idea, and it's one that could be pretty interesting but there's a lot more that you can ...

Yo Fortis, you have a good few constructive comments on this already, so I'm gonna try and keep it brief. I like what you've got going here, the image is ...

Hey ho, Walker! Like dudette, I tihnk the main problem I have here is defining the relationship between the he and the she. Some of the descriptions, the glasses at ...

'Ello 'ello! :D It seemed as if Mother Nature knew that something terrible had just happened, and now the world was in mourning. Or perhaps it was just me. You ...

Hello there, Shinda! The first paragraph of a novel is probably one of the most important, it's the thing that's got to hook us, lure us in to read more, ...

Hello there, Shinda! Science fiction is my guilty pleasure, and I've decided to indulge myself ;D Some nitpicks and small things, to begin with: not to mention the strange colors; ...

Hey PSW, it's been a while, no? ;D I think this is pretty interesting, but some of the phrases feel a little... Stilted? As if they're being put in a ...

'Ello Stella! You said you had some great reviews on the first part of this (and so you do!) so I thought I'd mosey on down to this part ;D ...

Hi, skintightgenes! I see you're new around these parts, why no pop over to the welcome mat and say hello :D As Leahweird says, short does not equal uninteresting, and ...

Hey dasiamari! At the moment, this doesn't really read much like a story -- it really does feel a lot like a diary entry. The thing is though, not an ...

Hi, Sionarama! Her breathing was rough and shaky as tears streak her chubby cheeks. A small something to begin with, as the story is set in the past tense, that ...

Hello there, amygabb! It's been a while since I've reviewed anything, so apologies for being out of practice! some bits and pieces to begin with: I crawl along the fence ...

Hi Hayes! It makes me wonder though, do comics that think they’re funny actually sound funny? That would make laughter and jokes a constant drum in their hearts. Supermodels that ...

Hi retrodisco! :D I'm from the same side neck o' the woods as you, so relevant question -- did you catch Channel 4's My Big Fat Gypsy Wedding ? If ...