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  • "All happy families resemble one another; each unhappy family is unhappy in its own way." - Leo Tolstoy I, unfortunately, am a cynic. While happiness may not be a muse ...

    Fri Feb 08, 2013 6:45 pm

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    Re: "we don't need roads"

    #5. Debriefing They dropped a 4,000 kilo payload on us at dawn. I spent 48 hours in the drink and listened to men die. They shut up 20 hours in, ...

    Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:44 am

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    Re: "we don't need roads"

    #4. Displacement Ben was five pounds four ounces and never really gained much more than that. He smiled pretty pretty when my wife tickled his nose and coughed and shivered ...

    Sat Apr 21, 2012 9:39 am

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    Re: "we don't need roads"

    #3. Married young She stretched nearly nude under the covers the cotton dangling limp across her familiar body and snored as the moon found her slatted, slanted, hot breath and ...

    Thu Apr 19, 2012 2:18 am

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    Re: "we don't need roads"

    #2. You always go home alone The stars reel or maybe it’s my gait walking upward on clouds shifting underfoot like a Lilliputian microcosm and the telephone wires pull me ...

    Wed Apr 18, 2012 3:07 am

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    Re: "we don't need roads"

    Was kinda looking forward to this a while ago, so I suppose I'll give it a whirl. It's doomed from the start, but so it goes. #1. Asinine She called ...

    Wed Apr 18, 2012 2:34 am

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Creativity

    No, no. Don't do that. You can't delete a post after someone else has commented on it for reasons of decency and trackability. Just ask someone with a differently colored ...

    Thu Jan 26, 2012 2:43 pm

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Butterfly Colony

    Well, I hope this is just an introduction to something grander! I hope you someday get down to the nitty gritty details and flesh out a plot and characters and ...

    Mon Jan 23, 2012 4:14 pm

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    Re: hometown.

    Interesting idea, but not thought out or followed through or explored in depth. The wording is choppy and blocky and doesn't flow. It took some control whilst I was gone ...

    Fri Jan 20, 2012 4:06 pm

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    Re: Finding Alana

    The beginning was very promising. I was engaged by this family of 26 children and thought it amusing and I wanted to learn more. But then, as soon as she ...

    Fri Jan 20, 2012 3:55 pm

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Lady Hamilton Lane

    I appreciate the attempt--you took your time, acted confidently, and kept your wits about you--but the piece is ultimately long winded and fails to explain enough to the reader. with ...

    Fri Jan 20, 2012 3:38 pm

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    Re: Please, stop.

    Pretty interesting and creepy! The ghost of one of Sam's famous parties I didn't really get this line...since when are boarded up windows a part of a party? I'm assuming ...

    Fri Jan 20, 2012 3:22 pm

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    Re: Creativity

    Not really a story. No plot or characterization or dialogue or motives. But, we'll discuss it as is. You seem to be trying to cram two different attitudes into here. ...

    Fri Jan 20, 2012 3:06 pm


  • On a little more abstract and psychological point: Gauge the market. If the forum you intend to post in is flooded by pieces with 0 and 1 review counts that ...

    Thu Jan 19, 2012 8:11 pm

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Fox

    Simple and to the point. Depending on the situation and intent, that could be meritorious. You switch tenses a few times. You begin in present tense, go to past tense, ...

    Wed Jan 18, 2012 9:25 pm


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