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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Change

    Gone, are those weak thoughts. Returned, has that fire within me. Free, am I from those heavy rocks. Pointless, has been my stupidity. Up, is where I’ll be aiming. Down, ...

    Oct 19, 2011

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Never Be Said

    ....wow.... I cannot believe no one has reviewed this yet! Its amazing! I must say for this piece to grab is an accomplishment. I rarely read first person pieces because ...

    Oct 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Do i care?

    Random words meaningless- written everywhere over here,over there Can you not- feel my despair? do you think that i ,truly care? I wanna run with the reckless emotion,find out if ...

    Oct 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Behind all my smiles

    I really liked this! It was a nice simple read. But...you need to capitalize all of your I's and capitalize each word that starts a new line. So it should ...

    Oct 19, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: A Little Friendly Competition

    "was lacking where it ends?" LOL! Why does that have to be where it ends? Tell me when a story actually ends! Because it doesn't it just depends on where/when ...

    Aug 20, 2011

  • Lyrics » General, General
    Re: You're Not Alone

    This was very good! I enjoyed reading it. It flowed nicely and your rhythm was wonderful! Keep up the good work and keep writing! You are are very good! Dawning ...

    Jul 1, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: [Post Deleted]

    Hayden it was great as usual! BUT the snake needs LEGS he isn't cursed yet, so he needs legs then he can loose them latter. Okay? Sorry this is just.....bugging ...

    Jun 29, 2011

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Rachel

    I have been reading the stories for this contest and they are all very good. But the twists are not very twisted... I've predicted all of the endings so far ...

    Jun 27, 2011

  • Article / Essay » Review, General
    Re: The Inkheart Seris

    I saw the movie and hated it. How's the book in comparison? The movie sucked..... The books are AMAZING! And different from the movie! The movie ruined the story and ...

    Jun 23, 2011

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: No Witnesses

    Hmmmmm.... It was interesting. But I did not see the twist, unless it was the MC killing Chad. :/ I have read/watched something like this before a LONG time ago, ...

    Jun 23, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: I'd like to write a poem

    Knight, This poem was amazing! I loved your rhyming and the flow to this piece. I could not find anything wrong with this poem, that the others have yet to ...

    Jun 11, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Guardians of the Jrakkon Stone (Chapter 2)

    Here we go! The Lightning Guardian My 6-year-old brother, Thomas, was staring at the cartoon, peering at the screen so intently that I was afraid his face would run into ...

    Apr 28, 2011

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Love Lost

    You know when you wrote this we were both in a.....sad mood... Every time I read this it makes me cry and think of those two characters....this better NOT actually ...

    Apr 28, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General
    Re: The Master Mind: Chapter 1

    This was a nice piece, I quite enjoyed it. However as others have stated your some of your sentences are short, choppy, and hard to read. You show a lot ...

    Apr 26, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Adventures of Death and Plague (chapter two)

    “Don’t touch this.” “Oh, my apologies, I didn’t know you were King of the Cane.” She said snidely, adjusting her glasses with her middle and index fingers. Her cherry lips ...

    Apr 25, 2011


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