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  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: May Nightmare

    Hiya you! This is a very articulate poem. I felt for the young woman's experience, and I am very sorry if any of this is a reflection of your own ...

    Tue May 10, 2016 7:02 pm

  • Other » Humor, General
    Re: Inside/Outside

    I really really like the emotion and the message in this poem. This sort of stuff has been a theme of a lot of my poetry lately so it was ...

    Wed May 04, 2016 8:40 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Romantic
    Re: To Become A Knight: Prologue - Abandoned Agony

    Ooooooooh I enjoyed this and I am intrigued! The title says this is the Prologue; does the rest of the story take place between the two paragraphs? I hope so ...

    Sun Aug 02, 2015 12:14 pm

  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative
    Re: Untitled

    This is really good but first I would like to offer you a hug because I know how you are feeling and it is not very nice. I really enjoyed ...

    Wed Feb 04, 2015 9:59 pm


  • Ooooh prettttttyyyyyyyyyyy! It felt like there were all these different elements and that they just suddenly wound all together at the end with the last syllable, while also being a ...

    Wed Feb 04, 2015 9:54 pm

  • Poetry » Horror, General
    Re: Fields Of Murder

    Hey, I really enjoyed this poem! It felt like dark humour to me, but maybe it was plain old dark and I'm just twisted. The second stanza was absolutely brilliant ...

    Mon Feb 02, 2015 9:53 pm


  • Mmmmmm, lovely! It took me two reads to really understand what was going on but it's beautiuflly written. I agree abut you needing to capitalise the 'I's. Maybe not the ...

    Sun Dec 22, 2013 10:11 pm

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Just Another Day

    ohmigosh :O ohmigosh :O ohmigosh :O like, welcome to YWS :D :D :D I hope you like like it here :D Ummm, I'm gonna like review this! :D OK? :D ...

    Sun Apr 28, 2013 2:20 pm

  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic
    Re: A Twisted Torture

    SCHADENFREUDE! this story is very almost SCHADENFREUDE, we think, my precious. We loveses the schadenfreude in this, Precious. We loveses it. We loveses how he watches his friend die and ...

    Sun Apr 28, 2013 9:12 am

  • Short Story » Supernatural, Other
    Re: Sloth

    Helloooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Here to review, as requested. I see now the theme of this thingy that you're doing. The Seven Deadly Sins, no? I didn't find the character, this Nyline, particula

    Sun Apr 14, 2013 5:22 pm

  • Poetry » Politics, Dramatic
    Re: Pride In America.

    Hey! Here to review (finally!) as requested. This is the best poem of yours that I've read. It's really good. You've got some truly lovely lines. I am extremely impressed. ...

    Sun Apr 14, 2013 5:03 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Other, Other
    Re: The Revenge

    i won't do a full review because the other reviewers did some very good jobs and i don't have anything much to add, but I'll give you a little one ...

    Sun Apr 14, 2013 4:38 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Other, General
    Re: Lust

    Here to review as requested! I've always sort of wondered about cowriting something but thought I'd probably be really rubbish at it (very controlling, sure my ideas are the best, ...

    Sun Mar 31, 2013 4:53 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: That Boy: Part 5

    Hey! Looks like I've got behind on reviewing this thing! :O ANyway, I'll do this section! Firstly, you have a really great writing style and your grammar and spelling are ...

    Sun Mar 31, 2013 9:34 am

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: found

    you over described a bit in places like here: "Lilly was the cool person type with a brown hair boyish haircut with a dark red streak running down her bang ...

    Sun Mar 24, 2013 3:00 pm


If it looks like a duck, and it quacks like a duck…you should not be so quick to jump to conclusions.
— Cecil Gershwin Palmer