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Hiya you! This is a very articulate poem. I felt for the young woman's experience, and I am very sorry if any of this is a reflection of your own ...

I really really like the emotion and the message in this poem. This sort of stuff has been a theme of a lot of my poetry lately so it was ...

Ooooooooh I enjoyed this and I am intrigued! The title says this is the Prologue; does the rest of the story take place between the two paragraphs? I hope so ...

This is really good but first I would like to offer you a hug because I know how you are feeling and it is not very nice. I really enjoyed ...

Ooooh prettttttyyyyyyyyyyy! It felt like there were all these different elements and that they just suddenly wound all together at the end with the last syllable, while also being a ...

Hey, I really enjoyed this poem! It felt like dark humour to me, but maybe it was plain old dark and I'm just twisted. The second stanza was absolutely brilliant ...

Mmmmmm, lovely! It took me two reads to really understand what was going on but it's beautiuflly written. I agree abut you needing to capitalise the 'I's. Maybe not the ...

ohmigosh :O ohmigosh :O ohmigosh :O like, welcome to YWS :D :D :D I hope you like like it here :D Ummm, I'm gonna like review this! :D OK? :D ...

SCHADENFREUDE! this story is very almost SCHADENFREUDE, we think, my precious. We loveses the schadenfreude in this, Precious. We loveses it. We loveses how he watches his friend die and ...

Helloooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo! Here to review, as requested. I see now the theme of this thingy that you're doing. The Seven Deadly Sins, no? I didn't find the character, this Nyline, particula

Hey! Here to review (finally!) as requested. This is the best poem of yours that I've read. It's really good. You've got some truly lovely lines. I am extremely impressed. ...

i won't do a full review because the other reviewers did some very good jobs and i don't have anything much to add, but I'll give you a little one ...

Here to review as requested! I've always sort of wondered about cowriting something but thought I'd probably be really rubbish at it (very controlling, sure my ideas are the best, ...

Hey! Looks like I've got behind on reviewing this thing! :O ANyway, I'll do this section! Firstly, you have a really great writing style and your grammar and spelling are ...

you over described a bit in places like here: "Lilly was the cool person type with a brown hair boyish haircut with a dark red streak running down her bang ...