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  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Wetfire- Chapter eight

    Hi again, really interesting chapter. I like you you are slowly connecting all the different characters you've been building up to this point. I am a bit confused as I ...

    Mar 15, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: The Lost City of Atlanits-Chapter one

    Hi. That was a very interesting start. I'm not sure whether to say Leena is a spoiled brat or feel sorry for her. The grass always seems greener on the ...

    Mar 9, 2023

  • Hi again, I just couldn't wait to see what happened next. "No. It couldn’t be real. But, the silhouette. None of the other voices had one" I knew the building ...

    Mar 6, 2023

  • Hi, I haven't reviewed a story this long yet so I apologise if I miss something or overexplain. This is also the first work of yours that I've read and ...

    Mar 6, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic
    Re: King of the Court - 0

    Hi, I love the passion that went into this story about basketball. First thing I wanted to mention was that I was a bit confused at first that 7th grade ...

    Mar 5, 2023

  • Poetry » Spiritual, Narrative
    Re: A Lost Sojourner.

    Wow. I wish I had the courage to write something like this. I happen to be really struggling with self denial right now and am trying to practice fasting but ...

    Mar 5, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: The Lost City of Atlantis-Prolouge

    Hi, I am very interested to see how this relates to Wetfire. Perhaps that's why the Leafwing fell into the water? Either way, this story was very interesting on it's ...

    Mar 4, 2023

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: when the chat room's empty

    Wow! This was awesome! I love how you used a real life experience like this. I've always found that your own experiences create the most passionate and enjoyable poetry. Most ...

    Mar 4, 2023

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Dragons Egg

    Hi, I know this story already has a lot of reviews but I just had to talk about it since I love scenes like this so much. I won't mention ...

    Mar 1, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: Wetfire: Chapter Seven

    Yay! Another chapter of Wetfire! It felt like you rushed this one a bit and there were quite a few places that could have used more detail. Silver and Snowfall's ...

    Mar 1, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: Before the Dragon - Chapter 1.2

    Hi, I was expecting the man to be down for the count but now we've got a whole bar fight to deal with. I love the way you described this ...

    Mar 1, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy
    Re: Before the Dragon - Chapter 1.1

    Oof! Straight through his skull? Dang, she's even stronger than I initially thought. Killing the guy wasn't that surprising I guess. He did kind of deserve it after all. (unless ...

    Feb 27, 2023

  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative
    Re: after years in the desert

    This is a very interesting take on poetry. I have a few comments about the use of new lines and spaces in between, though I want to preface this with ...

    Feb 25, 2023

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction
    Re: (LMSVI) The Ruptured Shadow, Chapter 1.1

    Well, this was not what I was expecting after that prologue. Interesting concept and a futuristic feel that I really enjoyed. I love how it seemed so similar and yet ...

    Feb 19, 2023

  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic
    Re: you're beautiful when you're genuine

    Great story. I really liked the message of this and it encouraged me. If you want some advice about your writing and style then this is what I have to ...

    Feb 19, 2023

“I am not worried, Harry," said Dumbledore, his voice a little stronger despite the freezing water. "I am with you.”
— Albus Dumbledore, Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince