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  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Future street kid

    Let's just start off with the nitpicks. ^^ Suddenly everything change (changes). Or sale her body (sell) I kind of like it. The theme of it is a very teenager ...

    Sun May 06, 2012 7:31 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Imagine

    I really like it. You really capture the entire idea of how imagination works , and how important it is. You have set the mood really well , and with ...

    Sun Oct 09, 2011 8:40 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Adoption [Edited]

    This is just an amazing poem. To start with , I have to say that you have really succeded to bring out a really powerfull set of emotions. I really ...

    Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:29 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: For My Father

    Hy! Here to review a bit. One thing I noticed that the scenery you have created is amazing. I could see myself there, by the falls. I really love how ...

    Wed Mar 02, 2011 2:51 pm

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: On Frail Wings of Vanity and Wax

    Hy. I'm going to review this today. General Idea I like it. I like the message it transmits; even though I don't understand some parts , I bet that they ...

    Wed Mar 02, 2011 2:46 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: School time dreaming

    I like they way you rhymed this poem and the flow is good too. Ignoring some "oopsies" (xD) it is really good, the theme chosen being kind of , lets ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:43 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: archaeopteryx

    I like it. I really do. Even though the structure is a bit odd, the scenery and emotions you've brung up are amazing. I love the way you've written it ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:39 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Burial on Sale

    Strange.. Really strange.. Guess that is why I like it. It is no ordinary poem , combining consumerism and death , which are two things I've never thought of using ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:33 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Inspiration...

    Hy! First of all, congratulations on a good poem, but it could use some tweaking. The structure of it is good, taking things in steps , but you could have ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:28 am

  • Lyrics » General, General
    Re: The Answer

    I agree with idraax. The format is kind of interesting. But still , 'tis a great pair of lyrics. I like the message they send , and they would really ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:23 am

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Acceptance

    Even if it is short, it really expresses a lot. I love the way it slowly builds up tensions , and in the end “She’s not sore anymore.” . You ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 10:03 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Hope Lives

    I really love the theme you've chosen. It is hard to write about life and it's ways, but you've managed quite well. Whenever I read it , I kind of ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 9:56 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Wait, Before You Go

    Hy! First, I just want to congratulate you on a very, VERY good poem. It is perfect in every way. The flow is good, the emotions are really well contured ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 9:47 am

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Can't

    Hy! I will review this poem , aparently. I like it, I really do , but I think the flow is kind of messed up due to all the full ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 9:36 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Paolo

    Hy! I really like this poem, even though it is a wee bit abstract. The flow of it and word choice is really good. With those, you've created the scenery ...

    Sun Feb 27, 2011 9:23 am


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