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  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: My Best Friend is Gay.

    This is some incredible work. It really did hit home for me because I too have best friends struggling with sexuality and its consequences. I am so so so glad ...

    Wed Apr 15, 2015 2:39 pm

  • Article / Essay » Realistic, General
    Re: Regret

    Hello again! Here for a short mini teeny tiny review because there is not much wrong with this article. Not much wrong at all. I think its great. Loved your ...

    Thu Jul 10, 2014 10:40 am

  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: Love's Challenges

    Hello There! Promised you I'd review some of your work so here goes :D A poem about love. Being your first poem on YWS, I don't know if you are ...

    Thu Jul 10, 2014 10:20 am

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: Brothers

    Hey hey hey! Look at this! This has definitely gone places! I'm loving it. There are tiny nitpicks but you know I suck at those, so ill leave them to ...

    Thu Jul 10, 2014 7:51 am

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Brothers

    Hello, Alrighty then, lets get down to business. Good story. I like the concept. First problem: Minor Issue. "jumping from one hostile to the next", You mean jumping from one ...

    Fri Jul 04, 2014 6:52 am

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Other
    Re: She had asthma

    Great Job describing this. I'm very familiar with Asthma, I thought you really captured the image well. I loved the rhythm and the flow. Very easy to read. I had ...

    Fri Jun 20, 2014 7:03 am

  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Other
    Re: Some Wings Can't Fly

    This story has potential... I really enjoyed reading it. Few problems. IT WAS REALLY LONG... REALLY LONG. Not really a short story. Chapters maybe? Few grammar stuff and forgotten words ...

    Sun Jun 15, 2014 3:58 pm

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Lustful stares.

    Hello there :) Alright then... First off, Great job capturing that moment mate. You did a great job relaying the scene to the reader. I love the imagery, vivid, perfect ...

    Sun Jun 15, 2014 3:22 pm

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: All I wanted was Closure

    Hello! First of all. DANG! Good job man! This is some great stuff.. LOVED IT! Okay now.... I do think you could have had a better title to it. Something ...

    Thu Jun 12, 2014 9:32 am

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Other
    Re: Older Sister, Younger Sister

    WOW. This is Brilliant. Very powerful. I loved your wording. You are so talented :) I do feel you could improve your younger sister's perspective. I liked how you started ...

    Wed Jun 11, 2014 10:30 am


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