Poetry » Narrative, General
Re: My Best Friend is Gay.
This is some incredible work. It really did hit home for me because I too have best friends struggling with sexuality and its consequences. I am so so so glad ...
Article / Essay » Realistic, General
Hello again! Here for a short mini teeny tiny review because there is not much wrong with this article. Not much wrong at all. I think its great. Loved your ...
Poetry » Romantic, Realistic
Re: Love's Challenges
Hello There! Promised you I'd review some of your work so here goes :D A poem about love. Being your first poem on YWS, I don't know if you are ...
Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Dramatic
Hey hey hey! Look at this! This has definitely gone places! I'm loving it. There are tiny nitpicks but you know I suck at those, so ill leave them to ...
Short Story » Romantic, General
Hello, Alrighty then, lets get down to business. Good story. I like the concept. First problem: Minor Issue. "jumping from one hostile to the next", You mean jumping from one ...
Poetry » Lyrical, Other
Re: She had asthma
Great Job describing this. I'm very familiar with Asthma, I thought you really captured the image well. I loved the rhythm and the flow. Very easy to read. I had ...
Short Story » Historical Fiction, Other
Re: Some Wings Can't Fly
This story has potential... I really enjoyed reading it. Few problems. IT WAS REALLY LONG... REALLY LONG. Not really a short story. Chapters maybe? Few grammar stuff and forgotten words ...
Poetry » General, General
Re: Lustful stares.
Hello there :) Alright then... First off, Great job capturing that moment mate. You did a great job relaying the scene to the reader. I love the imagery, vivid, perfect ...
Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
Re: All I wanted was Closure
Hello! First of all. DANG! Good job man! This is some great stuff.. LOVED IT! Okay now.... I do think you could have had a better title to it. Something ...
Short Story » Dramatic, Other
Re: Older Sister, Younger Sister
WOW. This is Brilliant. Very powerful. I loved your wording. You are so talented :) I do feel you could improve your younger sister's perspective. I liked how you started ...