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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Historical Fiction
    Re: The Secret Service page #1

    Ooh, a sly tale! So, so, we've got this...sly character with their brown wool coat at the tavern. The beginning starts off with this character in one of the lighted ...

    Wed Jun 18, 2014 9:19 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other
    Re: Goldfish Getaway

    Hello! Prepare for a review! To begin with, let's start out with the title! It's a nicely selected one, it considers the poem's subject--obviously a goldfish for a subject as ...

    Sun May 25, 2014 7:48 pm

  • Poetry » Humor, Satire
    Re: Dull Pencils

    Hey, at least you made use of your time during the test xD Anyways, onwards to the review! This definitely humored me, being that I have this feeling, too. The ...

    Mon Mar 24, 2014 8:09 pm

  • Poetry » Lyrical, Satire
    Re: Deleted

    I like how you take a cruel topic such as this one and turn it into a decent poem all the while. I left reading this poem with the impression....of ...

    Sun Mar 23, 2014 5:24 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Alone and Unwanted

    When I was reading this, each word felt powerful but coming from somewhere deep. The notion you provide the readers with is well-developed and supported, building up until the poem's ...

    Sun Mar 23, 2014 1:42 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: to my ex

    Ooookay, I see how this particular poem was listed under dramatic XD Moving on, the subject of the poem was very unclear. First of all, the title was misleading. You ...

    Sun Mar 23, 2014 1:23 am

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: freedom

    I read this poem feeling, as sunshine said, powerful. You supported your poem with an effective message, all the while sticking to the subject and title of the poem. Your ...

    Sun Mar 23, 2014 1:05 am

  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic
    Re: The Pain of Waking Up

    Wow, my first impression of the poem was almost suspenseful. It had an overall mystery surrounding it and in the end, especially that concluding line, I felt satisfied with this ...

    Sun Mar 23, 2014 12:34 am

  • Short Story » General, Teen Fiction
    Re: Valley of Death

    This was an entertaining short story with both a tone and writing style that I now commend. Though at first I was uncertain of what the story was going to ...

    Sat Mar 22, 2014 1:22 am

  • Short Story » Humor, Teen Fiction
    Re: The Dare

    Though I have read many stories, both short and long, revolving around a dare, this was a different take from the rest. You don't necessarily focus on the external conflict ...

    Sat Mar 22, 2014 12:33 am

  • Lyrics » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: Four Years Ago

    This was actually an amazing song. I really felt for the speaker of the song and the particular memories that she buried up from four years ago were fitting. The ...

    Sat Mar 22, 2014 12:10 am

  • Poetry » Romantic, Other
    Re: One single human emotion

    You chose a very deep topic to dive into and it's promising. I enjoyed it, however, like all literary works, there's always room for improvement. Hopefully, you'll consider the following ...

    Fri Mar 21, 2014 11:52 pm

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: What If I Don't Want to Smile?

    This was one of the few poems that not only appealing, it was riveting my inner thoughts. You don't use a formal tone either, which is the better choice in ...

    Fri Mar 21, 2014 1:00 am

  • Poetry » Literature, Romantic
    Re: Melody

    Very intriguing notions you have in this poem. It's novelty from what I've read thus far as well. Melody is a song I played only once. Maybe, if you wish, ...

    Thu Mar 20, 2014 11:51 pm


  • I like your formatting! It seems both fitting and somewhat better this way. I really like this poem. You were undeviating throughout the poem and focused on the general themes ...

    Thu Mar 20, 2014 11:09 pm


There is nothing more radical or counter-cultural, at the moment, than laying down one’s cynicism in favour of tender vulnerability.
— John Green