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  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Minds in Communion

    Okay Indrashish, this is a really cool bit of work, (I found it very interesting) but you were a little bit to complicated with it, I mean explaining exactly what ...

    Nov 9, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Starry Sky

    Ello Gallifreygal11. Jonathan here for a review, hope it helps. First off you need lots of punctuation, lots more I mean. What do you mean by "As I watch face ...

    May 31, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Saffron

    Ello. Jonathan here with a review for ya. {Well the note made sense, except for the "when is was near dying" part. (What do you mean) :?} Okay the first ...

    May 27, 2014

  • Poetry » Literature, Lyrical
    Re: Homecoming

    Hey 781228 Jonathan here for a review forgive me if it lacks awesomeness because I haven't done a review in forever. Anyways you start of real well but you have ...

    May 14, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture
    Re: Why am I repeating myself?

    Hey Shea. Me here with a review, Hopefully it will help. Okay well I was there for a bit but I left early so I can write in ignorance of ...

    Feb 1, 2014

  • Poetry » Horror, General
    Re: When the sweet child swims

    Hey Rhiasofia. "strands of sea and sand" Okay what do you mean by STRANDS OF SEA? "Lightning fish"? Is this a special kind of fish I would be better maybe ...

    Jan 31, 2014

  • Poetry » Spiritual, Other
    Re: Why I believe in God.

    Hey Take. Jonathan here for a little review for your poem. "Christianity is not a belief" Well are you simply stating that it is true or are you saying that ...

    Jan 25, 2014

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Calypso

    Hello Elinor. Hmm. This well written, I am guwssing that you got this from PJATO. I don't think you should have put"Do you not see the glittering white sand, " ...

    Sep 11, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Romantic
    Re: Think Like a Dude Entry #3 - Pickup Lines

    Hello Ink. Jon here. This was pretty good though it didn't make as much sense as before. Okay the first chapter was a good intro. The secound was not as ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: So Low

    Ello. except for one who takes his feet. He takes his feet, now this sounds like he had his feet blown off and he picks them up and walks out ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: A Cowardly Pandora

    Jonathan here with a review for you from the knights of the green room. Well this was more of a story than a poem in my opinion. I think it ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Poetry » Humor, Other
    Re: Benjamin Bumblebee

    Rydia this was a cheat. you are the greatest poet to have ever walked the green castles halls. For some reason I have to agree with that last two lines. ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Romantic
    Re: Think Like A Dude Entry #2

    Maths, you should just say Math, not that it maters. Well nice job for this episode although for the name I would turn "Dude" into "Guy" just sying it might ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Romantic
    Re: Think Like A Dude

    Well this was well written it had barley any problems, I suppose life can't seem unrealistic. And well you may be right you may be wrong but my dad died ...

    Sep 7, 2013

  • Poetry » Health, Realistic
    Re: Brain Tumor

    Hello Yubbies. Jonathan here with a review for you from the knights of the green room. Well one of my relatives got a brain tumor not long ago and died ...

    Sep 6, 2013


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