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Jenthura

  • Lyrics » Romantic, Realistic
    Re: False Alarm

    Ok, now that I've listened to it, I'm prepared to leave a review. I'm going to be reviewing the words mostly, but with the thought of how it sounds also, ...

    Sat Dec 16, 2017 11:22 pm

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Dramatic
    Re: The Hand Strikes

    Nice. A little wordy. Definitely a twist ending, but a little unexpected in a bad way. I believe that a good twist ending has some foreshadowing and hints that let ...

    Sat Nov 11, 2017 9:59 pm

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative
    Re: The Ledge

    Dude. Nice. I like this a lot. You killed it with that goddamn last line. It's absolutely absurd and I love it. It reads clean, the idea comes across well, ...

    Sat Nov 04, 2017 8:58 am

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: the sounds of the fire truck sirens

    Damn. This is difficult to read. So visually interesting though! 1. Layinguch? What does that mean? Oh, it's laying and then couch. But why is couch spread out like that. ...

    Sat Oct 21, 2017 8:46 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Two)

    "That pizza needs eating" Best quote. “There you are! Holy mackerel Effie, I’ve been scouring the garden looking for you, almost filed a missing person’s report! Have you been in ...

    Sun Feb 07, 2016 7:56 am

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Dramatic
    Re: A seriously bad story.

    I remember when this contest came out a few years ago. I questioned the purpose of such a contest at the time, but I realize now that being able to ...

    Mon Sep 16, 2013 2:21 pm

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Grandpa's Words (Coke On The Rocks)

    *cracks fingers* Let's get to this. Don't let a qualm prowl to whisper near your mind, Poetry is all about smooth, fluid movement to me (unless a poem is trying ...

    Thu May 09, 2013 9:30 pm

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Book

    A book is just a book, they say. With words like thou and art and thee, Just made of paper, wood or clay, They say this, but I disagree. How ...

    Wed Oct 10, 2012 10:05 am

  • Short Story » Humor, Literature
    Re: Equity Division

    You know, I actually read an article about a couple in...Malaysia was it? Can't remember. Anyways, they actually did this. Took a chainsaw to a house and cut it apart. ...

    Tue Jun 26, 2012 9:18 pm

  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: Deliverance: Chapter 1

    Wow! I quite like the characters in this story. You lost me little while introducing the band, but the story picked up from there. You've got your characters already set ...

    Tue Jun 26, 2012 1:55 am

  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Earth to Sarah

    First, I wanna say something nice... There, done. :P Now, your quotations, (ie: "Why?") should all be on a new paragragh. So, for instance, this lovely bit of dialogue should ...

    Tue Jun 26, 2012 1:42 am

  • Other » General, General
    Re: photographies

    Bigfoot! :lol: First off, I want to know how you layered the pictures or whatever (second and third). Was it computer editing or was that a camera setting? Either way, ...

    Tue Feb 07, 2012 10:49 am

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: The Street Urchin

    One thing that confused me was how you introduced the dirtiness of the boy's clothes in the beginning, obviously showing us that he had been on the streets for some ...

    Wed Jan 04, 2012 5:39 am

  • Article / Essay » General, General
    Re: The Bus Af-fare

    Wow. I travel by bus a lot too, so I can sympathize with you on the uncomfortable seating positions. I've never had any trouble getting a ticket, though, since I ...

    Wed Oct 26, 2011 3:23 am

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Breaking Free

    Nice work! I like the energy in the opening scene, and the way you introduced the characters. Nicely done, but not done completely yet. Here are a few pointers. I ...

    Fri Oct 07, 2011 3:44 pm


You can't blame the writer for what the characters say.
— Truman Capote